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Open Poetry #14

Death a personal god

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

0 posted 2001-06-07 06:49 PM

You try to buy my silence
and my soul
But I not a piece of bloody meat
to market
Your candy coated lies
sicken me
I spent the night by the throne
because of primetime
Every morning
wake to the horried
feeling of violation
like the victim of rape
but You do rape me
thrusting your tiny invisable phallus
into my virigin mind
with sitcom fantasies
and "reality" tv
I beg for knowledge
but you taunt with Regis
I cry for years
my mind is hemmoraged
as I stand before my forgotten
bookshelf
and do a mental re enactedment
of "The Crying Game"
as I purge "must see tv"
from my soul
with Camu and Poe
In one moment
I destroy you
putting my boot
through your pretty sceen
proving your mortality
as the sound of sparks
feel the night.

[This message has been edited by Brad Majors (edited 06-07-2001).]

azblond
Senior Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 637
The Steamy Desert

1 posted 2001-06-07 07:02 PM

The meaning is great and I understand where you are coming from in this. If I may however...there are a few typos that keep it from being as great as it should...I hope you don't mind!

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2001-06-07 07:14 PM

thank you I am editing them

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

3 posted 2001-06-07 07:18 PM

Great ideas. I liked the thyme of this poem a great deal. It is very powerful.

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