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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-06-06 03:45 PM

It must have taken all night long
for you to think that thought
and coldly calculating when
you'd have attention caught.
Tell me did you watch me sleep
in wait of venom's spew?
Do tell me, tell me everything
with you I have no clue.
And No. I don't suggest you lie.
I think you have convenient truth.
Tonight I'm kicking down the walls,
to hell with me and you.

No more, no more of suffering!
Isn't that the way?
and should the going prove too tough
then let's just blow it all away!
Take it all--I've had enough
just let me grab my walking shoes.
Oh please I beg you, call the bluff.
I'll show the cards. Be done with you.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-06-06 03:49 PM

No need to call the bluff...cards most certainly laid face up on the table. Powerful!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-06-06 03:50 PM

Serenity..........wow........this grabbed me by my heart.......and shook it.......wow.....

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-06-06 03:59 PM

Fantastic.....absolutely fantastic.....well done and I mean that.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-06-06 04:15 PM

You go, gal!

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

5 posted 2001-06-06 04:16 PM

the verses here read like a slap around the face. POwerful words, very powerful.

"Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett

Tovi
Member

since 2001-06-05

Posts 168

6 posted 2001-06-06 04:59 PM

Convenient truth......I like that! My compliments. Very well done.

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

7 posted 2001-06-06 06:43 PM

You tell him Serenity, you tell him

Tonight I'm kicking down the walls,
to hell with me and you

Oh please I beg you, call the bluff.
I'll show the cards. Be done with you

Those are some strong words girl, good for you.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-06-06 07:03 PM

Kickin butt and taking names...
me twin is tired of somebody playing games!!

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-06-06 07:18 PM

it's always better just to end the game sometimes. . .

great job with this one. . . lots of power here. . .

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snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

10 posted 2001-06-06 10:06 PM

Nope, no need to put up with the nonsense...great write, serenity!

sp

I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why
Everything gotta change around me
I’d tell it to your face,
But you lost your face along the way...

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