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should I ever know you...............................
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should I ever know you............................... |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
should I ever know you it comes to me, all untied less gilt or silvered foil certainly no need to look into a horse’s mouth, as what might be only a line __________________________ to you is not how I perceive this boon which, though never wrapped in silver or gilt I unravel and de-layer by morn’s light or noon day sun or in caliginous night this gift to share it pleases me to see thoughts swell up from my quiet depths where they have welled for so long this boon to shower you should I ever know you, and should you ever cause this well to dry, to cause my throat to parch, my skin to dessicate, my will to evaporate, I fear we would both be lost….. but….. should I ever know you, and should you ever cause me to reach for paper pen ink, it would be then that you would know you fulfill me completely…. and that the swell would have just begun…. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Oh, my ... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My my..... so much said.... wonderful... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I would work on the lines, some are too long. The flow is excellent and the meaning expressive. Kathleen Blake |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wow, some great images here I unravel and de-layer by morn’s light or noon day sun or in caliginous night Enjoyed this a lot "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lady In White, This is almost too beautiful, if that is possible. You get a WOW on this one and you know that I don't often pass those out. Michael Proust- |
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Hope New Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 4The Lighthouse Keeper's Beam |
Could be my cousin has taken arrow from quiver there is no pain only sudden realization Perhaps my sister you should consult "Hope IS like a lighthouse Keeper's beam" |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Lady in White,,oh so very nice, it flowed very beautifully to me...gentle smile |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadyInWhite~ This is perfectly LOVELY ! ! ! ! You sure know how to wrap a gift ! My pleasure to untie it again and again. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
which, though never wrapped in silver or gilt I unravel and de-layer by morn’s light or noon day sun or in caliginous night ========================= should I ever know you, and should you ever cause me to reach for paper pen ink, it would be then that you would know you fulfill me completely…. and that the swell would have just begun…. ============================== yes,,,PLEASE do reach for pen and paper... do it often...and let us wrap it up for you  very very well done Lady... quite an inspiration  she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Actually the last half of Janet Marie, as I loved the part about being stirred enough to pick up paper and pen. Again, a fantastic write. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Interloper, Cpat, kind responses, thank you... Irish, thank you. Brian, I am pleased, then, thank you! Auguste, a kind remark, and appreciated. Thank you. Hope, please send the address....thank you! Logan, smiling back....thanks.... Marge, you know it is the unwrapping where the smiles begin.... JanetMarie, I shall listen to you....your heart seems to know this well.... Mysteria, as do you....thank you.... |
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