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Sunshine

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0 posted 2001-04-07 10:59 AM

Foretelling Eulogies

let me not linger, but pass away
on nothing other than a summer’s day
for I was born in December’s cold
therefore, I’ll have grown quite old

and, yes, remember my golden days
so pleased was I, in my holding phase
that I might pass in summer’s sun
when times are right, and I am done

let the zenith of the sun
choose the time when I am one
of memory, clear thought and smile
remember me kindly, all the while

allow me scents of wild roses, true
settle me ‘neath lucid skies of blue
and let the breeze of voices clear
tickle afterthoughts of me, held dear

smile, please, smile, on my lay down
this final day, and look yet around
to see the visions that I have seen,
there in your heart, hold yet a dream

for when I pass on a summer’s day
my whim of hope, I’ve had my way
and know in spirit, I’ll walk with you
as the sun reigns high, in skies of blue

SEA

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1 posted 2001-04-07 11:03 AM

Sunshine~ this is amazing.....you are amazing.....

Joyce Johnson

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2 posted 2001-04-07 11:07 AM

You'll go as you write. In Sunshine. Joyce

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3 posted 2001-04-07 11:10 AM

The rhyme and rhythm of this is exquisite, save for the following lines, they just don't feel quite right. The rest is to well woven and powerful, I felt I wanted to at least state my perspective. You're the author and your opinion's most important, though. It may just be the way I'm reading it.

smile, please, smile, on my lay down
this final day, and look yet around

Marge Tindal

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4 posted 2001-04-07 11:15 AM

Karilea~
Oh, yes ...

'smile, please, smile, on my lay down
this final day, and look yet around
to see the visions that I have seen,
there in your heart, hold yet a dream'

... to leave a smile where we have been~
the greatest gift we give a friend~

Beautifully expressed, my sweet poet friend.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie

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5 posted 2001-04-07 11:17 AM

Karilea--I think whenever you lay down there will be rain...even on a sunny day. This poem is exquisite!

Wilfred Yeats
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6 posted 2001-04-07 12:05 PM

Assuming My last wishes are carried out -
to have my ashes spread out over the Grand Canyon -
I'm left to wonder where any 'stone might be placed - and what inscription might be placed on it (not thought out yet) -
Let me simply say this: I can think of no words I'd rather have engraved on it

suthern

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7 posted 2001-04-07 02:13 PM

Wonderful poem... and how could you ever be remembered but kindly? *S*

walker
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8 posted 2001-04-07 02:55 PM

So beautiful,thanks for sharing !

Marsha

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9 posted 2001-04-07 03:07 PM

Kari dear heart, But Persephony is ever young, and she wakes Puck even if only to zoom in see this and say it's AMAZING truly fabulous writing and yes I adore it. Outstandingly perfect poem always your rhyme is top notch.
Take care love and warm stuff
Puck

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

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10 posted 2001-04-07 04:27 PM

Beautiful sunshine, Sunshine.

My favorite line..

"remember me kindly, all the while"

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

Mysteria

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11 posted 2001-04-07 06:16 PM

Oh this was just so good, (I'm getting it!)
"smile, please, smile, on my lay down
this final day, and look yet around
to see the visions that I have seen,
there in your heart, hold yet a dream"

...this was simply beautiful, and this of course if the greatest gift one can leave behind.

I just loved this one, into the binder she goes!

~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~

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