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Perdition (rewrite)
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Perdition (rewrite) |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Questions, never to be answered questions, Now lost in curses of man's ambitions, Set adrift; bereft of thoughts inclined, Whilst echoes through silent chambers; cloistered mind, Sorrow of my sorrow, what hast thee wraught, As rob of dreams from shallow grave unsought, I am like you, with sister and brother, Betrayer of all hopes, in silence smother, As dark shadows rest on sunken grave and vault, Listen, then listen hard, to pain's exalt, Adrift upon this sea by trust betrayed, I shall attempt no seige nor escalade, For I know thee, as now I know my face, Scourged by scorpion, midst gulfs of space, Nevermore eschew the sufferer to borrow, What hast thee wraught, sorrow of my sorrow. Night's tideless sea, dark depths of melancholy, Tempetuous ports, brazed vestibules of folly, Unburied hopes, punctured lives of stinging sin, Swell the howling chorus, o’er gulf of man's perdition. Cloaks the light, Cassandra, future's slave, Sail primordial seas, silent tombs of Neptune's grave, Solemn moans of pounding waves, rise forth the sobbing sea, Echoes of a brooding gloom, rise forth the sobbing sea. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mike? This is SO rich in metaphor and imagery...I found it amazing azzamatta-dafact!  This goes into the library...there is so much here....I want to look it over again. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
pssssssssst!forgot to put perdition in my library! ROFL...ty again! |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Mike, you have done an amazing job with this rewrite. Strong image of sea and her terms of our survival. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wow! This is fantastic!!! Kathleen Blake |
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