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Tearjerker strikes in an emotional downpour!
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Tearjerker strikes in an emotional downpour! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Tell me why are you keen on finding fault at everything I do? Is it because you want to push me away-- so far away that I never ever dream of coming closer again? Yet, you say you desire that I remain to be your best friend! While, I keep myself on offer to be there right by your side when you need me most with my shoulder ever ready to be wetted by your tears with my ears always open to hear your words of distress with my arms always stretched to give you a comforting hug. Yes, I will be always there for you, forever. Yet, you want to cause me to hurt, to push me away so far away that you don't want to feel obligated to be closer again But don't you realise that I never wished you to feel obligated? Love is that highway where lovers meet when their small paths conjoin and then on, it becomes a long drive, and all they need to remember is there are other vehicles driving too, and be just that bit careful not to crash into one. You knew this already, while this was my first, you were my first -- you are the only one yet whom I kissed or touched. There is no one in my mind yet, I doubt if there will be any evermore for, there is the doubt that lives growing like a wild weed -- an offspring of a bad seed in my heart, my mind evergrowing! Yet, you chose to crash this wagon of our love, that you were driving and all I tried was see a way, find our way of life full with infinite dreams! Well, after the crash, all those remain are insurance companies and firemen coming to clean up the mess …and memories of you and me who couldn't be we! '!' [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 04-05-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
aw...sudhir? this IS a tearjerker! And your insights as to why someone would repeatedly cause us pain are very astute. Now, if you can figure out why we allow that? Lemme know, will ya? sigh, sigh...wonderful read! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--First love is always a memory that will be kept in your heart...sometimes it is best to let it stay there and move on to something else...for I can see you are miserable trying to save it as friendship...I loved your road and car insurance metaphor and the wisdom that you are gaining from driving around. My best to you sweet man...hugs! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Serene One... thanks... I will let you know, if I find an answer to that one... Martie, I think that misery is my friend for now... I am trying to tag along the road... Thanks a lot for your comforting words... and for the hugs... Regards, Sudhir |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, you said a mouth full in the title. A tearjerker indeed!! Wow, such longing in this one. I hope it all works out. WIsh I knew why the ones we love most are the ones we always seem to push away. Sigh . . . All writing comes |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lone Wolf, Thank you so much for coming by and for the wonderful response... Regards, Sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"There is no one in my mind yet, I doubt if there will be any evermore" One of the wonderful things about love is that it happens in spite of full minds and doubts... it doesn't always happen right away and sometimes we walk many despairing miles with only our doubts for company... and then one day, we notice someone else on or near our path... and the pain is delegated to a memory scrapbook to be learned from but no longer lived. This is a tearjerker... but it's filled with insight and says much about the heart that's hurting, that's caring in spite of the pain. Well done! |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
First loves are very special. As an old woman, I can tell you that you never forget the good memories or the lasting feelings that rue the day departed. However, they are many more love to create, meet and greet. So my hope for you is that you shall be blessed as you move forward in your life. Shalom. ~~Julian "I am not now that which I have been." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
all I could do after reading was ~sigh...I actually wanted it to end so the painful feelings would...huggsss ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes this is how elusive love is...for if the feelings are not the same in two hearts the scorned heart will know torture....and as the beauty of love lured us to them the pain of love will drive us away to a safe haven...and some day we will feel the desire to try again...and hopefully this time love will smile for us and not bring us tears....James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Suddi Hugs m'friend Maree Love which is not always springing is always dying. |
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