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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Truth It’s time I spoke to me of truth…free of youth and olds vermouth It tears my heart to really start…but start I must for truth and heart. There stands the sacred family tree…of all of them and those to be. It is a passion needs be said…to set things straight before I’m dead I have three children very near…a fact of fate and very dear. I do not say they all are saints…but I register no complaints. They are half my bad, half my good…and half my wife that’s understood. I love them more then I can say…beyond my PERTs naivety I have two girls the best of best…they are the treasures of my chest Though one has too much over see…and one a touch of miserly. Forgive me girls for what I say…it makes no difference any way. I loved you from your very youth…I loved you even more than truth. My son has flown onto a shelf…into the confines of himself And he has gone the furthest far…into the misty mist of moiré. My hands are stretch far out in prayer…that we will touch some way somewhere But if we miss before that day…I loved you more than words can say. Please forgive my imperfections…they were not my true affections. I leave you with my mist of morn…where none were ever asked be born. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It takes a certain time, and a certain day, to know where our parent's heart might lay that you have spoken truth, is clear and the why herein that we hold you dear |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have three children very near…a fact of fate and very dear. I do not say they all are saints…but I register no complaints. They are half my bad, half my good…and half my wife that’s understood. I love them more then I can say…beyond my PERTs naivety I have two girls the best of best…they are the treasures of my chest Though one has too much over see…and one a touch of miserly. Forgive me girls for what I say…it makes no difference any way. I loved you from your very youth…I loved you even more than truth. My son has flown onto a shelf…into the confines of himself And he has gone the furthest far…into the misty mist of moiré. My hands are stretch far out in prayer…that we will touch some way somewhere But if we miss before that day…I loved you more than words can say. Please forgive my imperfections…they were not my true affections. I leave you with my mist of morn…where none were ever asked be born. ========================= ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis!! critiquing this would be like critiquing someones heart and soul... cant be done.... this is so special and so beautiful in its intend, inspire, and sincerety. you just need to kissed for this jewel in your poetic crown  "They are half my bad, half my good…and half my wife that’s understood." and that line is SO COOL!!! love ya for this one Sy-babes *winkiewinkie*  me |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
OH Sy..this is precious my friend... really precious... thanks for the glimpse... love ya  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very elegantly written, though half good and half bad, loved this line.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks for such a wonderful insight... Regards my friend, Seymour... Sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--This brought a tear to my eye, for the truth and tender meaning behind your words. You are extraordinary, you know? Hugs! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you for sharing this. A pleasure to read. All writing comes |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The beauty and elegance of your writing is simply astounding. Truly splendid and inspirational work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This style suits you very well, Sir Sy! One of your best, this is a wonderful testament from your heart Take care, Melissa~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 04-05-2001).] |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
A wonderful, moving poem. Lovely read. Thank you. Mike |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
What more can one say but that you love them no matter what. Enjoyed a look in your heart. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, OHHOWILOVEITWHENYOUWRITELIKETHIS. Winkiewinkie Stinky Severn, A lovely wonderful comment. *L* Rosebud, Thank you for the elegant. Sudhir, Thank you for the read. Martie, Not as extrodinary as you. *L* Lone Wolf, A pleasure to have you read it. Banbury, Thank you so much. Melissa, Thank you My Lady, *L* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Packratmike, A wonderful moving answer. thanks Into2B, Enjoyed your comment, thanks. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
forgot to put this gem in me library silly me *L* |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Tabin... what can one say about such truth of heart... very touching... wonderfully expressed... I have no doubt that this was a tough write, but you did it justice. I bow to you and yours. Peace! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You got more of me than I have of myself. LOL Andrew, And I truely thank you for the wonderful comment. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"Please forgive my imperfections…they were not my true affections." It seems almost an impossible task to sum up life in just a line... but for so many of us, you've done that with this one. *S* I love this, Seymour... you've written a beauty! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, One more dip into the well I feel the ripple and the swell. Thank you sweet. *L* |
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