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Our Last Season
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Our Last Season |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Our Last Season Never thought I would mourn the passing of winter My least favorite season, I don’t do snow well Mostly sit inside Sometimes I open the blinds Telling myself I should appreciate the beauty But not this winter…I’ve known for quite some time We would remain an undeveloped photo Our last season to love I find that I need to indulge In, please, one more night of loving you It’s warm in your reality if only by denial I accept that you have entered your own spring You won’t know I’m here I swear you won’t see a tear As I sit alone in winter quietly remembering |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But not this winter…I’ve known for quite some time We would remain an undeveloped photo Our last season to love I find that I need to indulge In, please, one more night of loving you It’s warm in your reality if only by denial I accept that you have entered your own spring You won’t know I’m here I swear you won’t see a tear As I sit alone in winter quietly remembering ==================== you have employed some very cool metaphors here JLR and some great poetic phrases as well. bittersweet and emotive. well done oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
"We remain an undeveloped photo.." ------------------ Ah, this is so bittersweet. To know that someone has moved on while we're still clinging to the memories. Awesome read!  |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Tugs the heartstrings "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JLR....I am overwhelmed by this plea....'tis a keeper....for my library |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JLR, You swing a mean claymore. "Double edged sward." Well done. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JLR~ Poignant piece. Touching reality can sometimes be awfully cold .. *Hugs* to you. 'I don’t do snow well' Me either !  LOVE THIS LINE !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
full of your heart my friend. . . excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
JLR--The reality of this hurts...but there is also a kind of peaceful acceptance that I like...you have written the impact of moving and staying very well! |
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tradewind Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 101 |
very nice metaphor and well worded piece, JLR i, and many others can relate to the meaning in this one. but time marches on... thanks for posting this. |
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HeartsBlood New Member
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2 |
Cycles cycles how do they flash by and burn in our memories BrandedMinds of Feeling Psychologists say we forget the bad the painful the sad the undoings and shame we are acquited with life by their Lord High Confessors realm to kiss the ring Reborn But it's not like that for all you know to some no matter the cathartic exercise sweat blood hope that which was existence is not forgotten instead the Historian of HellandALL sharpens his quill in sigh and records ALL curse or blessing divine these memories which mark us as mankind we learn remember teach built on all we know tears and blood our gift our legacy blood and learning more so giving our hope that tears of wasted lives ends now it is why we speak of hearts torn and asunder flying to give all we are to to tiny smiles There is no Last season. There are only people who give up on the land. "All blood through the heart passing is either purified or poisoned therein. Look to your heart with that question" [This message has been edited by HeartsBlood (edited 03-26-2001).] |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
JLR, such a sad, final peice. Tugs at the heart, it does. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. I loved this! kepp it up...you are on a roll. *Laura* |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
This one's not only sad, but truly beautiful...another of those ..."wish I had done that" reads. I really enjoy your style (probably upset a few people by popping all yours back to the top...but got in a groove... jwesley |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oh, this one will get ya for sure. You grabbed my heart and wouldn't let go, JLR. Wow, powerful. All writing comes |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
great images - moving on when your wheels are stuck can be hard. Thanks for the read. J |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
After the winter, we have the promise of spring, you have endure the winter my friend, you will prevail. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
We would remain an undeveloped photo ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ WOW. Glad I did not miss this one. WELL DONE! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful....  still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This really touched my heart.......... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved your poem but I live for the snow! Funny how we are all different? Wonderful analogy in your poem as well as ending an relationship of any kind has elements of sadness and cold. Great job. ~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The way you thead this poem with so much emotion and so much of your heart is truly astounding. This is really beautiful work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I humbly thank you all for reading and responding and apologize for not doing so earlier. Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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