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Venice (revised)
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Venice (revised) |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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The city of masks whose grayness reflects indifference,-- Venice, you’re bound to suffer the fate of Atlantis. Thus, finding a small cozy place in one of your attics, a poet stands ready to capture the end of existence. Reflecting off the dark water the stars shine brightly. Dreams are redoubled here,-- the nights are wonderful. The poet inhales the air and writes, “Death seems doubtful,” exhales, pauses, and continues on, “...afterlife likely.” Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master [This message has been edited by Master (edited 03-31-2001).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoy reading your work, you know. Your poetic outlook is always quite refreshing and this is no exception. I believe you could tighten it up a bit by removing unnecessary commas, but that is, of course, a minor detail. The writing, itself, is something special. Were you in Venice when you wrote it, or was this from memory? Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Claire, this is from memory... Venice made quite an impact on me when I was there. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I enjoy the way, and what you write. Thanks for sharing. *Peace. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
ah, Italy, yes, next year I'm going to Europe but only Ireland and England and maybe France..... Kathleen Blake |
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