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The Lawn Bowlers
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The Lawn Bowlers |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
The Lawn Bowlers I still recall them in the park. They seemed removed And set apart from the confusion of shade Sprawled beneath the oaks. Dressed all in white, With the occasional straw hat Catching the light, They looked almost Like candles on a green vestment. I had no way of knowing Whether or not their lives were equally upright But at that moment, As I sat there on the blanket, Filled with you And the picnic basket of our teenage hearts Overflowing, I felt their presence. RMW |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
sigh...sounds like my kind of picnic |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Hi Paula. Thanks so much. Yes, I have fond memories of confusing picnics. Bob |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
made me think of my teenage years, last year was the last one, by the way  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wonderful work, Bob. I love these kinds of poems, thank you for posting it! Corinne |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Nice imagery - this has such a physical presence... good job!  K |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Very Nice, Robere... *smiles* -MeToo |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
very interesting images indeed. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I love this, Bob! It made me think of those famous paintings, and I'm so artist illiterate I can't name the artist, but it seems it would be a Frenchman. Anyway the paintings I'm thinking of are: one--a beach scene with a few people on the shore, standing barefoot in the water, yet fully clothed, ladies holding a parasol the other--gentlemen and gentleladies on an estate doing croquet, I think pristine scenery and people I don't know if I've described them well enough for you to know which I'm talking about, but suffice it to say, your poem is a work of vivid art, though words are all you've used. You have captured my heart with them and my mind's eye.  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely vision, Bob. All writing comes |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"...like candles on a green vestment...." you have an artist's eye, and a poet's heart... well done Sir! |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This painted a wonderful picture and was truly a pleasure to read. excellent writing... Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hmmmmm.. thinking on this one... i know i like it yuh |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you all. You are very kind. Now, who brought the hot dogs? Bob |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You painted the scene so well... This was excellent. |
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