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Open Poetry #13

Delicate Wash and Wear

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-03-30 08:53 PM

You're in thoughts
Ripping
Tearing at seams
With your mental seam ripper.
Stop that, please
You're begged to stop
As this thin material
Has already taken its beating
Don't pry
Just wrap this silky material
Around your heart
And remember
That the tears you cause
Will waterstain tender and beautiful fabric.
Gentle cycle this within your hands,
Wear it as it softly devestates
Your sense of controlling fashion.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 2001-03-30 08:55 PM

Clever use of a metaphor, well expressed!

Take care,
Melissa~

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-03-30 10:39 PM

I like this. Your comparison of tender feelings to delicate material is great. joyc

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2001-03-31 08:50 AM

Melissa..
Thank you..I'm so glad you liked it. I do enjoy using metaphors.

Joyce..
Tender is an understatement when I write it..

I'm glad you liked this.

In the worst of times, let me drift beneath the cloak of Oblivion. I favor the night as it favors me.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-03-31 01:07 PM

sometimes, we need to start over again with a new pattern. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

5 posted 2001-03-31 01:49 PM

controlling.... is not good... nope.... don't allow it..... great metaphor here .... my head is in the spin cycle..... i think i have the same exact thoughts.... geesh

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-03-31 03:59 PM

I enjoyed reading your poem...James

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