Open Poetry #13 |
It's Just Salt |
Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
It’s just salt salt worthy, once, of its weight in gold encompassing the earth in waters blue brackish in areas where it’s lost its hue briny in foam of white a clue sometimes to see a mate in shaker form that adds some spice beyond the norm it’s just salt from life we’re formed can’t live without we’re told to think that it is crystalline in nature and soluble to be known as a weighted valuable or refreshing wit you’d think that salt was the “it” of “it” but all she knew when she looked at you as you walked away was that you salted your words so heavily like an old mine chock full of gold for fools and even for awhile you were the salt of her earth so as she watched you walk away it crossed her mind, how strange, that the taste of the liquid tear to her lips would make her think yet of you |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
So deep and it makes absolute sense too. It is so truthful in the telling here my Lady. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I totally agree with PK. You have captured "Salt" for all it is. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I like this so much, especially that priceless ending! It makes me want to do my next column about salt for next week's newspaper, wait, no, my column won't be out until the week after that. Anyway, thanks for sharing this profound piece wonderfully crafted, Lady in White. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Salty sweat - Salty tears - salty words = and with your fantastic extrapolation: salted words - LiW - Seeing your name in PIP compells me now to read - I know I'll not be disappointed ~S~ - I loved this - 'twill go among my treasures |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It's just salt... but when contemplated by your pen, it's worth agains compares with that of purest gold. *S* Beautiful ending! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
in the wounds. . . excellent words my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
You have all offered much in your replies, thank you for reading so carefully.... |
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