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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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She realises, walking along the leaf-scattered, familiar paths of home, he really does involve the world. Sunsets (fiery over clouds) only remind her of cliffs and hills – strange birds pecking at insects where he is. She thinks: I don’t give a damn about logic or the past. I’m failing here, whiting out like a flash of sheet lightning. All this agony over details and what-ifs and it isn’t fairs. They’re pale too – stain-glassed without any sun behind. She realises, as buildings turn round her and traffic is only filtered noise – she’s seeing the other hemisphere. Journeys are long sometimes. Yet, she won’t forget the sunlight on his floor. The way cushions are haphazard in the den – there’s magic in those. Yes, she’s a willing pioneer. ...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You have left me speechless for the moment Lady K... I will come back in the morning and try to give you a more proper reply... It is lovely though-- as is your usual.. J Jamie |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
All this agony over details and what-ifs and it isn’t fairs. They’re pale too – stain-glassed without any sun behind. Beautiful K as usual  Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant. [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey little K....I was going to try to rip away nicely....but darn, I like it just as it is.... it blew me away.... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Ahhhhhhhhhhhh ! 'Journeys are long sometimes. Yet, she won’t forget the sunlight on his floor. The way cushions are haphazard in the den – there’s magic in those.' Little sketches of designing thought ... Nicely done. *Hugs* ~*Marge(y)*~  ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Severn, "Somewhere, beyond the sea,...and never again I'll go sailing." (from an American tune). Your poem is very good. Soft, muted...with a flash of anger. What's the word...pensive. Thank you. Bob |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla-- Journeys are long sometimes, and one day you'll realize that the sun is always you, wherever you are. This is a wonderful, and a heart spoken longing look at your thoughts. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
S, I just love the feel of this, the hurt, angry touches, with the love behind. And the confusion. It is very well expressed. Sandra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
K--so that's where ya ben---journeying! This is so gently reflective, I could see, walking and thinking...very beautiful, but determined too. Miss you. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"I’m failing here, whiting out like a flash of sheet lightning." I like the double reference here to blindness and/or revelation? In that respect, I suppose,we are all "willing pioneers". Lovely, and so thought provoking. Thank you. "The poet is the priest of the invisible." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kamla, Very well done. Made me wink, think and drink and not too many do that. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
does the journey ever end??? you ask. . . but you already know the answer. . . I really liked this K, the thoughts are well placed. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Your creativity always comes through, you seem to have a way to make every word belong to you, even when I know, they are meant for me. Thank you for giving them to me. JJamie |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Beautiful, Severn. I've always enjoyed your unique style of writing.
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
A wistful and strikingly visual 'journey,' Kamla ... I was especially drawn in by the den with the haphazard pillows ... quite a vivid image! Linda [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Mmy - thankyou sweetie...you know how it is don't you...hugs... Kari - really? Well..as long as you got back up hey? LOL...hugs you.. Marge(y) - thankyou my friend...there were a thousand other images I could've written...sigh.. Bob - it is pensive yes...and longing...and a little angry. ThankYOU for your perceptive reading... Martie - miss you (hey -wanna be Kanga? lol) Thanks so much hon...is my heart that open? Sandra - hey hon, nice to hear from you Thanks so much for your thoughts on this...Karen love - I miss you too! (No ICQ at home at present...one day one day...) Thanks honey - big hugs, hope you are doing well.. Hey Coyote - and thankyou for reading...I really appreciate it... Sy - and that, my friend, is a true compliment...so glad we talk on the telephoney thing yanno? hope you're doing well... Svenny - hey you! Why thanks...I don't think journeys end no...how can they?Just A Woman - You have? Wow...cool! That's nice to hear..thankyou... Linda - thanks for dropping in hon...hugs...as I said to Marge - there were plenty more images too... J dear...they are simple truth. For you...so always search for the magic you have - in you and around you ok? Love you...  K...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 03-31-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
If you see magic, it is because you are the magician my dear. Jamie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I hope this willing pioneer will again venture forth into territories halfway round the world. Next time, though, it will be like coming home. Stay sweet, my dear Kamla Liz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a fine poem, next year I'm traveling to England to meet a dear friend, others have inspired me Kathleen Blake |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lizzy - firstly - I have to apologize for being such a horribly slack writer...I have no excuse that is good enough...I really will try to write soon - plus, I have photos to send you also Thankyou for reading - I know you understand this...hugs. I love you heaps.Kathleen - thanks for reading hon...England is also a place I intend to go... K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
yanno--- I don't think horribly slack is quite strong enough to describe the frequency of your letters....heh J |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh Kamla, This is amazingly wonderful writing... exceptional!!! feels great to read you... over and over... regards, sudhir |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
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SkyBrush New Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 4 |
Tremendous read…love the phrasings…. “Stain-glassed without any sun behind”….my poetic friend you have provided the sunlight….. New to the site SkyBrush |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Jamie now that is just mean...humph...you know what life is like...so there... but I accept the library adding thing... just... Suddy - hey there you..thanks for replying... Skybrush - love the username...and thanks for the compliment - welcome to our site K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
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