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Rhyme Without Reason/Cliche' Touche'
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Rhyme Without Reason/Cliche' Touche' |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Happily ever after is such a lie And true love is just a sad cliche' As is all your dreams coming true Nothing lasts forever anyway Unconditional comes with conditions Peace always comes with a price Patience is a virtue they say But don't make them have to tell you twice Hearts aren't where love is really held That's yet another dreamer's illusion And all those words of till the end of time Only adds to the inevitable conclusion The ties that bind just tie us down Nothing gold can stay Promises are just pretty lies something said, when there's nothing left to say Practice what you preach as a rule Sounds so easy when spoke in verse Do unto others as you wish done to you Living that out day to day becomes your curse The meek shall inherit the earth? Is that before or after the strong eat the weak? Who decides the fate of one and all? Where is the justice that the meek seek? Truth has no shades of gray they say All the answers are only in black and white So where is truth then found? In the dark of night or the blinding light? There are the ten commandments Countered by seven deadly sins What lies between heaven and hell? Is the last one left standing really the one who wins? They say you cant take it with you But look how many die trying So money cant buy happiness? Well then give me yours and I'll stop crying Who makes these rules and reasons? Who is the "they" in "they say" anyway? Who writes all the wisdom we quote? Who decides what is and isn't cliche? Where are all the rainbows? All the sunsets in violet washed hue I'd settle for just one moonlit night For one long walk on a beach with you I'm tired of this ache unending I'm tired of unrequited defining my soul Even in a crowed room, only feeling lonely And the emptiness takes its toll I need to write a happy ending Just like the gifted pen of poets do But there wont be a "happy ending" Just the beginning of the end of me and you Janet Marie *written after a conversation with a fellow poet about the "NEED" to rhyme and writing cliche' also just me trying to jumpstart a moody muse forgive the sarcastic melancholia... like I said the muse is moody  tis never easy being a moth, tis not easy being the flame. what some never see is-- sometimes ... most times ... they are one in the same. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 05-19-2001).] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Hello moody muse... the line... "nothing gold can stay..." brought to mind the polishing I do day by day by day to rub the lines of despair to keep up the 'I do care' and I try, and try and try and silently I cry and cry and sigh... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ The nicest compliment I can pay to cliché is ... By gadfry ... they always remember it !  And of course - rhyme is the icing on the cake ... the reason for the party - the bestest gift there is !  We'll invite a little free verse ~ A little balladeer ~ Just a little sonnet ~ to spread a little cheer ~ Shucks, let's get a little randy and won't it be just dandy ~ When with one flaming blow ~ he sets the candles all aglow ~ Some music for the singing ~ that our verses will be bringing ~ Pour a glass of Cabernet~ let us toast to a Happy Cliché ! *Bring that moody muse  I love ya', gal ... and this (...) is what I call sprinkles ! And I put 'em ALL OVER the cake !  Call Cowboy and tell him ... It's Party Time ... Let's BOOGIE ! Love n' hugs ~ ~*Cliché Party Girl*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I hope this is just a mood, but your poem made a lot of sense. Joyce |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I loved the whole poem it's deep and intriguing....like you said it's very moody and random writing...I'm gonna put this one in my library.....great writing...peace!! Nathan |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now that is my kind of party! Here I come! Great job on this one, I really enjoyed it. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
And I thought I was in a bad mood! Absolutely loved this. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Hey JM, I like you when you're moody!  I have to agree so much with Marge.... and you've done a great job! ~Sheri |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey...Love this...love the turning over of ideas...beautiful! Was like roasting an idealistic hot dog! (ssssh...don't even go there...) had quite a day m'self...quite misunderstood...sigh...not about a moth or flame or butterflies and smells bewitching of flowers beckoning....just the simple desire of life to live through another day... and how I wish you were here...smiles to you m'love. I am planting raspberries this weekend!!!!  |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Kudos. Bravo, Well done, etc. Great pondering. My favorites: The meek shall inherit the earth? Is that before or after the strong eat the weak? Who decides the fate of one and all? Where is the justice that the meek seek? Enough said. They say you cant take it with you But look how many die trying So money cant buy happiness? Well then give me yours and I'll stop crying I never wanted to be filthy rich, but don’t mind a little dirt, once in awhile. Melton |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just goes to show that a little cliche can go a long way. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Janet, I certainly hope this is just a moody muse.. even though what you say makes sense, it just isn't that happy  And one day I will learn to rhyme lolTaraB |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I love your moody muse! If I was to say otherwise, I would be lying and I think we get enough of that these days...don't you?? Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ when you do what you do......*sigh* Makes me wish I were you.....or at least your clever mind!! Wow....this is great, your muse is fantastic moods and all!! You know I love your poetry  SEA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ You little poet ... get yourself in here ! ! There's a PARTY in your honor ! (... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ...) Oops ! You were hiding in the cake ? ? Go-Go GIRLIE ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you all for endulging me moody muse... Sometimes they just come out sad... I dont question me muse anymore... Im just grateful she gives me a reason to rhyme every now and then. and Margie-girl ... YOU are the icing on the cake AND the sprinkles ... ... ... TY sweets...Im Ok...  thank you all for the kind replies. my love to poetry land  tis never easy being a moth, |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Do unto others as you wish done to you Living that out day to day becomes your curse well, you know I never thought of it as a curse but then I always interpret the first line a little different. do me do me moody musey. Parker |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Where are all the rainbows? All the sunsets in violet washed hue I'd settle for just one moonlit night For one long walk on a beach with you' Hey you...sorry it took me so long to reply...but, this is fantastic! Cliche or not, this is excellently written...love it, m'friend! sp  to be with you... |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet, couldn't get on the other day, then forgot!! A cliche' is great in your pen. What a play on words. The way we say things can be different when someone else says them. The rhymes and your mood go well together. Have fun at your party!!! Hugs, ME |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Parker...I like your take best *L*SP .. why thank ya mam... cliche olay thanks guys...ya spoil me We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ME...thank ya dear.... No matter how moody...I feel better when I rhyme thanks for the kind words. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Better late than never... right? *G* But I've gotta warn you... I think there are those who would say you've been hanging around me and my gloom FAR too long. *G* ================================= Where are all the rainbows? All the sunsets in violet washed hue I'd settle for just one moonlit night For one long walk on a beach with you I'm tired of this ache unending I'm tired of unrequited defining my soul Even in a crowed room, only feeling lonely And the emptiness takes its toll I need to write a happy ending Just like the gifted pen of poets do But there wont be a "happy ending" Just the beginning of the end of me and you =================================== You can call this cliche'd rhyme without reason if you like... I call it achingly good poetry... or good poetry that aches. *S* |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Wow, moody muse indeed - only one moonlight walk on the beach, I'd ask for more. Baskets of violets, rainbows after thunderstorms. *sigh*, I hope you have a happy ever after ending.LP let our hands communicate what's in our heart. A Wisp of a brush... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ruthie....thank you muchly .. and its never too late to have such wonderful words spoken, thanks always girlie LatinPassion... thank you very much for all the reads you gave me in this forum... I appreciate your time and kindness. I hope for happy endings for ALL of us. We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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