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Lucky Me(a reflection of my life)
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Lucky Me(a reflection of my life) |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Hello Passions, I actually wrote this today...I had to see if I haven't lost my touch(ya know what I mean?)I hope my personal pieces like this one touch you and I don't mind, if y'll critique or give me or give me a few pointers cause, I feel like I should change something....anyways, I hope y'll like the poem!! A million stars looked down upon me one night and left me with a smile, that shined like sunlight as a lucky star granted me, my deepest wish and kissed my soul, with the sweetest bliss....lucky me.... as I grew up in a controlled, decent household and as a kid, I stayed on the honor roll cause you see, mom guided me through life brilliantly and resiliently, giving me priceless advice, and teaching me responsibility.....lucky me..... as I've matured and grown to see the image vividly as I'm a young man full of vintage and positivity, who respects the king of complex, elders, and real ladies as I'm the proud father of two, beautiful black babies.....lucky me.... I guess that, out of a million cold blacks, I'm part of the few that never sold crack, never been incarcerated, never held a gun in my hands, never been high or intoxicated, or close to killing another man.....lucky me My counterparts, treat me like some kind of villan, they illin cause, I'm not out with them chillin as they despise me cause, I've been raised to be a decent individual, and unlike them, I'll never be subliminal or live life as a criminal.....lucky me..... as I'm a smart, young man that's full of vitality and spirituality as going against the grain, is the formality of my reality as people, criticize me and think whatever I do or say is odd but that's fine cause, I don't follow mankind, I follow the ways of God....lucky me..... as all the credit goes to God, for bringing me this far as he listened to my prayers and kissed me with a lucky star as I'm blessed, floating in a river of happiness, that never ends and like my lucky star in the sky, I shall sparkle and forever ascend.....lucky me! [This message has been edited by Nate Dogg (edited 05-19-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Nate~ this is awesome! It's sad though, to think that by being a good person, it's going against the grain.....seems to me, being a bad person should be what is singled out as being well, bad  I liked this very much. SEA |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Sea, your comments mean a lot to me!! Nathan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
as I've matured and grown to see the image vividly I'm a young man full of vintage and positivity, who respects the king of complex, elders, and real ladies as I'm the proud father of two, beautiful black babies.....lucky me.... I guess that, out of a million cold blacks, I'm part of the few that never sold crack, never been incarcerated, never held a gun in my hands, never been high or intoxicated, or close to killing another man.....lucky me ============================== as I'm a smart, young man that's full of vitality and spirituality as going against the grain, is the formality of my reality as people, criticize me and think whatever I do or say is odd but that's fine cause, I don't follow mankind, I follow the ways of God....lucky me..... as all the credit goes to God, for bringing me this far as he listened to my prayers and kissed me with a lucky star as, I'm floating, in a river of happiness that never ends and like my lucky star in the sky, I shall sparkle and forever ascend.....lucky me! ============================ Nate...this is very very cool and a special poem... its REAAAAL hard to even try to critique this as its sincerety, sentiment and message far out weight the poetical structure or intend. Sometimes even in poetry.. its what we say..not how "perfect" we say it. I love the repetition of the Lucky me and the whole theme of this is waay cool... Lucky you and lucky whoever knows you... you are a strong, wise and kind person, and setting a good example for your children in a world where that all too often is lost. Say it loud and say it proud Im so glad I got to read this and I think its one of your best... change the poem if ya need to... just dont change you..cuz your groovy  tis never easy being a moth, |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow Janet, your response makes me feel so good...this is exactly what I live for....this is why I love to post my work on here cause, people really seem to appreciate my work....thank you very, very, much Janet....you've made my day sweetie.....take care!! Nathan |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Please darlin Nathan...please dont change one word...oy yes LUCKY you to have come so far...and have so much...and give so much to us....LUCKY US!!!!!! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Haa,haa, thank you very much Paula!! Nathan |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I'm blessed. Floating in a river of happiness." This is something that I yearn for. Beautiful style and words...especially like how you used lucky me at the end of each...this is top gun writing Nate...James |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
I agree... Top gun writing Makes you feel great to be alive? EH? Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nate, my friend~ Very nice reflections, I'd say ! Be very proud of your stand with God ... He kind of has the 'others' beat ... hands down ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Nate, you and I have not always agreed, right? Well, I think this is the finest piece I have seen in a long time. As hard as it is to be yourself and stand up to what you were raised to do, continue to be the beautiful Black man that you are. Wonderful, wonderful, ME |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This is so great...and knowing it's a true 'story' makes it all the better. Wouldn't change a thing, about the poem or it's poet. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, I just came from work and I'm feeling the ultimate high as I sit here and read y'll beautiful compliments..thank each and everyone of you who took the time to respond....y'll just don't know how much it means to me cause practically, your compliments are priceless to me....god bless each and everyone of you.....oh yeah, I'm not gonna change a thing....peace!! Nathan [This message has been edited by Nate Dogg (edited 05-19-2001).] |
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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
THAT WAS GOOD!!! BIG UP TO YOU FOR ALSO THANKING THE ONE AND ONLY (GOD). NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17 |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
A beautiful token to have the opportunity to get a glimpse of your life. A very proud father. Thank you for sharing a piece of your life. let our hands communicate what's in our heart. A Wisp of a brush... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Latin Passion and Dyme, for your wonderful comments!~ Nathan |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool write! |
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