In Taking Care ..........[poetic response to RMW]

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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-05-17 10:01 AM

In Taking Care

simple request by one
to come
softly
quietly,
acquiescence requested
to give of himself,
and in response
this reply,

should thee feel
through the thin
a winter's beat
that lies within
would thou warm
this heart of mine
with but word lain
in a single line...

and in truth
he was
caught
by surprise

fear lingered
behind his eyes
for he did
not know
how this heart
felt, just so

or that if he
should feel
through the thin
a winter's beat
that there lays within

could he,
would he warm
this heart of one
with but word lain
in a single line...

now, alone, in this cool, dark, dawn

not forgetting
the fear that lingered
behind his eyes

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

1 posted 2001-05-17 10:18 AM

Decaflame....My first thought was to say that I am ...... unaccustomed to such attention, and to deny a desire for it. But then the scene of Joy when first meeting Clive...and his brother....for tea, flashed through my mind. Do you know, "The Shadowlands"? Thank you for this moment of light and warmth. Bob PS It would have taken me a week or more to craft a response such as yours. That you managed it in but a few hours is amazing. You have a gift.

[This message has been edited by RMW (edited 05-17-2001).]

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

2 posted 2001-05-17 10:21 AM

I have only heard of the Shadowlands, but know it not....

so very glad you found some "joy" in this....

thank you for reading....

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2001-05-17 10:27 AM

My pleasure. (Aside: Does no one watch movies anymore?)

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

4 posted 2001-05-17 11:29 AM

LOL...yes, I just haven't gotten to that one yet. Thanks for letting me "wax poetic" in response to your poem....

you, Sir, were the inspiration! This was just my appreciation!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2001-05-17 12:06 PM

And sitting in the wings, I am enjoying the gentle response so beautifully written, and your poetic souls interacting. Very nicely done poem Decaflame.

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~
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Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-05-17 04:08 PM

I would have to say it is remarkable to compose this in such a short time!
congratulations!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Cuddlez
Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362

7 posted 2001-05-17 04:14 PM

I love the last line
The fear that lingered behind his eyes!

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

8 posted 2001-05-17 04:22 PM

Single line is laid
a single word composes
and that word is FAITH

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

9 posted 2001-05-19 08:48 AM

Beautiful...

~Tier

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