Open Poetry #13 |
surrender sunrise |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
He's convinced I'm beautiful He tells me that I am... He holds my head in wonderment within the span of loving hands... He kisses every finger-- somehow it's not too much- the way that his eyes linger, and gentle rough of touch. He's convinced I'm beautiful and now I think, "I am..." Now, I am inscrutable-- just a twitch within his hands. Everything, was naught before. Just because I'd not ask more. Unworthy I, to let love in? I challenged and collapsed within. Tell me I am beautiful. Tell me I am free. Tell me I am twice as nice-- rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... make me take the glasses off, surrender sunrise eyes surprise-- laughter in begin of love... You are beautiful. He said. As was he. She smiles instead. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 05-17-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... Oh, me sista Oh my, I love these lines. You are beautiful my dear! Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-17-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, Maree took the best lines of this weave and hung them here in response.... so I will say...this was great...and thanks for sharing! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He's convinced I'm beautiful He tells me that I am... He holds my head in wonderment within the span of loving hands... He kisses every finger-- somehow it's not too much- the way that his eyes linger, and gentle rough of touch. ================================ Tell me I am beautiful. Tell me I am free. Tell me I am twice as nice-- rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... make me take the glasses off, surrender sunrise eyes surprise-- laughter in begin of love... You are beautiful. He said. As was he. She smiles instead. ========================= Youre a butterfly poet ..of course yer beautiful and when ya rhyme ... YER GORGEOUS..EXQUISITE!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE this poem girl!! me tis never easy being a moth, |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
serenity, "Tell me I am beautiful. Tell me I am free. Tell me I am twice as nice-- rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... make me take the glasses off, surrender sunrise eyes surprise-- laughter in begin of love..." I do believe that was my favorite part. I love your writing.. the feelings you convey.. I can identify with almost every poem I read of yours. But then again... I guess almost everyone can huh? Wonderful job! TaraB |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
The poem is beautiful. I love it. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, This is wonderful I really enjoyed, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Serene One, this is most excellent... and by the way did you just get 6 posts across... Many Congratulations Regards, Sudhir |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
this is ablsolutely breathtaking...nice to see the smiles in you |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sit back and enjoy. Well done. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
good to read something so uplifting from your pen!!!!! Kathleen Blake |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Fantastic write, serenity...every line is just brilliant! I love this one... sp to be with you... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ I just love what you do! This is beautiful |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah....now this makes me smile. I like it very much!!! Congratulations on 6000!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
congrats on the 6,000 my friend. . . and yes, you are beautiful. . . and so is this poem. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
twas too early this morn before me raspy tea, for me to notice your number... Congrats on 6000th toots (and ya was hoping to sneak by werent cha) tis never easy being a moth, |
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Cheryl Flemming Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 102 |
This is beautiful.The words really stay in your mind like that of a song. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Lovely poem,,,, congratulations on the milestone |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
you ARE beautiful...and congrats sugar... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
very nice, liked a lot. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent piece. Enjoyed this very much. And congratulations on 6000! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...the replies are almost as much fun as the inspiration ---Much thanks to all for reading! I love you all much and appreciate as always your kindness. Thanks! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
congrats on your 6000!!and this poem was wonderful...thanks for sharing and keep writing if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
There's beauty in everyone, and it feels so good to hear someone say it, isn't it. Thanks, Titia |
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Tough_Cookie Junior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 13USA |
You hold this beauty very nicely, and write it even better. Beautiful poem serenity! [This message has been edited by Tough_Cookie (edited 05-18-2001).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh yes. Beautiful indeed! To be told you're beautiful is a gift that is truly worth more than diamond or gold. You've done an excellent job in penning this piece girl! ~Sheri |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
yep... he's right.. you are hehe lovely!!! |
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