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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2001-05-16 06:41 PM

All this world is dust
Forgive me my moment
To dance the star shine flower

All this world is me
Commit me my fortune
That chances to distain

What fortress is calling
The end is near to me
Like the distance to your door

Cannot gamble slowly
Your words to the salvation
You answer my last line

All this world is bleeding
For recognition of the heart
That loosens the black soul

All this world is failing
Forgiveness is unclear
As the water dances in the dirt.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2001-05-16 08:00 PM

Your writing leaves me amazed each time....this is incredible....Wow...peace and hugs to you....

Lauren~

***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

2 posted 2001-05-16 08:36 PM

...which leaves .. mud?
is this the image you wanted to leave?

very enjoyable to read this--thanks.

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

3 posted 2001-05-16 10:16 PM

I run out of things to say. You write like no one I have ever known. You are a very complex poet. Lucky for us you put your heart and soul in every piece.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-05-17 12:09 PM

The end is near to me
Like the distance to your door
==================
Your words to the salvation
You answer my last line

All this world is bleeding
For recognition of the heart
That loosens the black soul

All this world is failing
Forgiveness is unclear
As the water dances in the dirt.
=============================

I do so love the way your poetic mind works
this is deep and intense.
excellece once again from your pen poet sir

tis never easy being a moth,
tis not easy being the flame.
what some never see is--
sometimes ... most times ...
they are one in the same.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

5 posted 2001-05-17 12:40 PM

in taking each line, one unto itself, what imagery you have conjured up....

and I can see the water dancing in the dirt...

it bounces, until fully absorbed....

just as your poem did.

Applauding!

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

6 posted 2001-05-17 01:22 PM

Yes, I must concour a very amazing write. I very much enjoy these gem you put together Micheal.

Parker

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