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Open Poetry #13

A box office hit

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2001-05-15 04:57 PM

Feeling anxious I spilled-
My life became a box office film,

The emotions rose from the ocean,
Caressing your skin like a summers lotion,

Many sat and watch it unfold-
No one was left to guess,
For the ending was known.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Mother_Earth
Senior Member

since 2000-11-20

Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan

1 posted 2001-05-17 07:14 PM

Xeonox, I don't understand what is happening here. Maybe something is wrong with me, but I like your poem. ME

HeAvEnS AnGeL
Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

2 posted 2001-05-17 07:37 PM

I think your poem is very pretty
and im new at this so yours
was the first one i looked at and i
really liked it

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

3 posted 2001-05-17 07:38 PM

Mother angel, I wanted to potray the image that we usually see in movies and heavens angel, I feel proud that you have read my work.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

4 posted 2001-05-17 07:55 PM

cool piece!

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

5 posted 2001-05-17 07:57 PM

Very nice. Joyce

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