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Xeonox
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0 posted 2001-05-15 04:57 PM


Feeling anxious I spilled-
My life became a box office film,

The emotions rose from the ocean,
Caressing your skin like a summers lotion,

Many sat and watch it unfold-
No one was left to guess,
For the ending was known.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

© Copyright 2001 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-17 07:14 PM


Xeonox, I don't understand what is happening here.  Maybe something is wrong with me, but I like your poem.  ME
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2 posted 2001-05-17 07:37 PM


I think your poem is very pretty
and im new at this so yours
was the first one i looked at and i
really liked it  

Xeonox
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3 posted 2001-05-17 07:38 PM


Mother angel, I wanted to potray the image that we usually see in movies and heavens angel, I feel proud that you have read my work.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Brad Majors
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4 posted 2001-05-17 07:55 PM


cool piece!
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5 posted 2001-05-17 07:57 PM


Very nice.  Joyce
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