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Spring Storm |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Lunchtime in the City Tunnel rats rushing everywhere Business suits subdued to bold Above our heads, the thunder roars As temperatures turn cold. Lines form at every restaurant It will be quite a wait Brows furrow as most scurry by Just can't afford to be late! Spring has fled and now winter's back And having its dreary way Why does it seem that no one thought To bring food from home today? My toes are crushed beneath some klutz What a miserable bunch I should give up and go to work But I really want some lunch! Afternoon at the Farm Temperature's dropping, no one can be stopping to rest, not anytime soon The stiff, bitter breeze means it surely will freeze - How cold it's become just since noon! Cans cover tomatoes, must mulch the potatoes, the okra does not stand a chance And the farmer will mourn plantings of peas and corn that he's lost to cruel circumstance. His trusted almanac seems to sorely lack accuracy - for this should be spring! He will save what he can and then just replant, and he'll hope for what next week will bring. Night and Morning at Home I'm shivering, shaking The storm keeps on waking Me and so I peek out the pane. My mind's in a muddle Just watching the puddle Grow as it continues to rain. Work duties are pressing, I hurry my dressing And rush out to get in my car. But I get a raw deal There sits Lake Oldsmobile Needing dried before it goes far. So back upstairs for towels With my temper quite foul I attempt to mop up the lake. Back up to change my clothes And so this morning goes I mourn for the bus I won't make. Always and Everywhere Every hour, the thought of you Comforts my soul and sees me through. Though we may be so far apart You're here, held safe inside my heart. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Look at me girlie ... all kinds of inspire going on here ... your muse had quads!!!! How'd ya do that?? LOL I love the farmer and his almanac of lack  and Lake Oldmobile? you quack me up  Well apparently your muse likes being all wet hun!! wonderful imagery and clever wit and humor in this Ruth... somedays ya just gotta blow raspberries at the rain  "Every hour, the thought of you Comforts my soul and sees me through. Though we may be so far apart You're here, held safe inside my heart." and i am loving this little heartshaped jewel my dear... and me thinks that THIS needs to be your signature quote for in here  yeppers I do ... what do ya think jellybeans? can I get a second on my yeppers oh you speak to me in riddles |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
i liked all 4 pieces, but when i read the last one Always and Everywhere. i was just so touched by the elegance of the words in just a few lines. Bernie a a day keeps the world 'G.Bernie Slicker |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, I'll second JM. Enjoyed the read. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern--Janet is always right...it would make a great signature piece..and the rain, the storm, brought out the smile in me...thank you, dear lady. |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
Wow Suthern, I wasn't ready for 4 - but reading quickly - will be back again - I liked all 4 of them. Cracked me up when I read Lake Oldsmobile - had a few cars like that myself after rains...Panne |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Good writing, entertaining. You seem to have a natural flair for poetic rhythm, Suthern. Thank you. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks me suthern belle needs some sunshine today and I forgot to mention how cool the inner rhyme in your Day on the Farm poem was  oh you speak to me in riddles |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
need a *bg* to make those storm clouds go away??? you know me...ever helpful *g* love this lady...thanks for sharing your world with us in such poetic finery and rofg@your muse had quads |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Janet Marie: What can I say? *G* She does act so irresponsibly at times... and then goes to visit someone else and skips out on diaper duty! LOL. (And if you wanta talk WET????? ROFL) Thank you so much... you always have the kindest responses! *S* But quitcher looking for a second to yer yeppers. LOL. The only signature I need is this autograph across my heart. *S* bslicker: That you found elegance touches ME greatly. *S* Thank you... those lines are my favorite, too! *S* Seymour: Thank you, sweet man... I'm so glad you enjoyed! *S* Martie: Now don't go telling her she's always right (even if she is!) LOL. Thank you, sweet lady... I'm glad it gave you a smile! *S* Panne: And isn't it the pits to run for shelter only to find where the rain's been collecting? LOL I'm very glad you liked... thank you! Meadowmuse: Thank you very much... your kind words are greatly appreciated! *S* JM: You are a dear... my meanie server won't show me the picture, but I know you choices, so I'm sure it's lovely. *S* But I DID get sunshine this morning... so this gal is smiling. *G* (Update... when I finished replying, the picture was there... and it IS lovely... thank you!) jellybeans: I'll be glad to share my chores, too???? (hopeful expression) LOL... Thank you, dear friend... you ARE ever helpful... and ever encouraging!!! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 03-29-2001).] |
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Coco Junior Member
since 2001-01-28
Posts 48 |
Great writing Suthern I enjoyed this read as there's a couple of times I can remember where I relate to some of these happenings... [This message has been edited by Coco (edited 04-28-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Coco: Thank you so much... I'm glad you enjoyed the read. *S* And you bumping this back up gave me the enjoyment of remembering the 4th part during a time when my life seems stuck on the 3rd. *S* I thank you for that! *S* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's raining poetry!!! these are great suthern!!! ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal~ WOW ! What a strand of pearls to find from you ! Yeah .... you already know which one I'm picking for my favorite ~ But ... I'm gonna do it anyway !  'Always and Everywhere Every hour, the thought of you Comforts my soul and sees me through. Though we may be so far apart You're here, held safe inside my heart.' Some kind o' beautiful ! Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Applause!!! Each and every one a treasure Suthern! Wonderful rhyme schemes you've penned, and a great flow in the reading. These were a joy to read aloud, and very entertaining. You've given a combination of smiles, grins (I love your "mourning the bus " line), and topped it off with a tender heart squeeze with this last beauty. Loved each one ... you've started my day with a smile! Best wishes, /Kit |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
glad someone bumped this one back up, I love this view from behind your eyes |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading your poems...James |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
suthern~ I was lost in everyone of these....so beautiful....thank you, thank you....for this spring storm.... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sven: Thank you... for the read, for the compliment... and especially for the smiles that image brought. *S* Marge: Thank you so much, dear lady... your favorite is mine also. And your unwavering support is so much appreciated... bless you. *S* Kit: Thank you very much... To give you a smile is inadequate payment for all you've given me in your poems and the kindness you've shown me... but it sure does warm my heart for you to shine that smile my way. *S* vandana: Thank you! jellybeans: Watch out, gal... get anywhere near my eyes these days and you may drown. *G* Thank you, dear friend... very much. James: Thank you... I'm very glad you enjoyed. Greeneyes: Thank YOU!!!! What a wonderful compliment... I'm humbled and grateful. *S* |
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