Open Poetry #13 |
She Is Sun, I , Moon |
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
~* She Is Sun ~ I, Moon *~~*She is Sun, I, Moon*~ Behold the beauty and power of the ocean. Her secret depths unknown to no one but God. Fathomless and daunting. Yet upon her swelling moods, It is we, brave and relentless souls, Who guide these simple barks from shore to shore. Even at the drawing of the celestial drapes, We sail onward by God's candlelight. Into the darkness we dare to change her ebbs and tides! For the call of the siren must be heeded, Less we never have the choice again. As she rises in the early morn, A robin dares not begin his song, Until she emerges from the folds of her oyster. She walks amongst the strewn petals of roses, And washes in the steamy waters, Of the hidden baths in the mountains. She dries the fluttering wings of a million butterflies, And rubs exotic flowers, whose names are long ago forgotten. She has truly descended from the Heavens above. She is the kiss upon your face in the summer, And the gentle warmth at the nape of your neck in the spring. She is the shining star that guides my thoughts, And the brilliant spice that motivates my spirit. Without her I am without beginning or end. With her I am complete. Full circle as the bands of gold,resting on our fingers. We stand in the heavens united as a single flame. Burning with the fever of life, and the passion of love, As an example for all to see on earth below. She is Sun, and I, Moon. * * * art: ~ www.allwall.com ~ ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This is an awesome write....and the picture to go with the words only lends itself to the magnificence of the piece itself.... |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Outstanding--- I especially liked the 3rd stanza. Nice image too, There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
This is breath taking.....what a magical piece from you.....I shall treasure it.... HUgs to you..... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Even at the drawing of the celestial drapes, We sail onward by God's candlelight. (VERY COOL LINES!!) Into the darkness we dare to change her ebbs and tides! For the call of the siren must be heeded, Less we never have the choice again. ======================= Mysteria...this is wonderful writing.... the employ of imagery and ethereal metaphor and comparisons of nature and emotion makes this an empowering read well poetess of natures graces tis never easy being a moth, |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You can shuffle metaphors better than a blackjack deale in Vegas (that's a compliment!!!! ) very nicely done.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mysteria~ And this is just the greatest ! Ahhhh ... what loveliness your muse has gifted us with ! 'Even at the drawing of the celestial drapes, We sail onward by God's candlelight.' 'A robin dares not begin his song, Until she emerges from the folds of her oyster.' TDC ! ! Check e-mail ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
"Ah, shucks", she says, as she curtseys with a slight rosy blush to her cheeks...you guys are the greatest. I love metaphors, and used them a lot as a kid, but Mom said, "spit it out girl...what do you want to say!. Thank you all for reading this. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (edited 05-14-2001).] |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
This is so cool. Love the poem and it is true that you can shuffle metaphor with the best of them. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
This brought tears to my eyes - so beautiful. This poem will live on thru eternity. I will cherish this one. LPassion. From the heart - sincerity. Where you go I follow. |
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Martha Cowan Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 240Groves, Texas |
I am....completely speechless...for the first time in my entire life. This has left me in awe and standing in the oceans of my thoughts and emotions at present...how beautiful life can be when you reach out and touch the heart of the person that destiny sent there to find you...it's a feeling too awesome to describe! I loved this, Sharon......................... I love you as well!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hugs and millions of smiles....dawn ("A's"...."D") |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Latin Passions: I am glad you loved it. This poem was written for my best friends one on one side of the world, one on the other, and all the earth inbetween does not lessen their love. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martha: YOU speechless, right! All kidding aside, you put a whole new meaning into "reach out and touch someone", long before they did! Love you girl! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This called to me and said "please, put me in your library" and voila... I have a keeper.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A stunning write! enjoyed it muchly Maree |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
your metaphor is perfection......wow Kathleen |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sunshine: I am honored to be in your library, thank you. Dark Angel: Thank you muchly! Irish Rose: I am glad you liked it, thank you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mysteria, This is very beautiful and original Superb writing A pleasure to read Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is excellent... Very much enjoyed reading this... thanks for sharing... regards, sudhir |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Lady Elizabeth: (and I say that with respect)...You have made my day! To have you like something I did, thrills me to no end, and I am serious (you are my mentor) - well I try to learn from you let me put it that way! Thank you so much! Sudhir: I am so glad you liked this one, it was fun to do. |
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