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Born in the Mist
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Born in the Mist |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Born in the Mist I was born in the snowy-white mist of the sky With a crystal clear image engraved in my eye The view of the dry sandy canyons below The desert where lupine and blue sages grow I had in my vision a valley serene Of hot sandy mounds and oasis of green The waters from springs rising up from a bed Of rocky terraine yeilding poppies of red With broad wings of black and white feathers alift I eased off the sheer granite walls of the cliff I could see white tipped peaks as they met with the sky The places of glory my feathers would fly My eye led me onward to dusty grey plains Where voices of spirits still whisper my name I could see in the distance blue sea and white shore The place of enchantment where swift wings would soar I flew off a cliff with a dream in my eye Encircling visions from blue of the sky I float over desert where voices still call Of tribes that once lived in the deep canyon wall With wind under feather and eye to the ground I float in the heights where the breezes abound At the top of the canyon where spirits exist Was born Golden Eagle, aloft in the mist Elizabeth Santos |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is imagery and cadence done poetically perfect... Liz this is wonderful writing and was a melody kissed treat to read aloud... love the title as well. superb as always poetess of cadence grace  Did you make it to the Milky Way, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is so beautiful, Liz, my friend... Thank you for your poetry, regards, sudhir |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your poetry is exceptionally flowing and moving, like a soft mist, yes, oh, I enjoyed reading this so much this morning, it lifted my spirits. Thank you. Kathleen Blake |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
And if an eagle were to speak, these would be his/her words, indeed.... Beautiful, Lady Santos.... |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
This is a truly beutiful poem, I know I say this every time, but I think it's your best yet, it's so difficult to know though, your poetry is so exceptual . I realy realy liked this poem . Thanks again and again . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Try not, do or do not, there is no try . |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This soars, Elizabeth... with a grace and beauty equal to that of its subject... Beautiful! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I don't think poetic rhythm could possibly get sweeter than this Elizabeth, absolutely devine cadence and rhyme ... a joy to read aloud. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Simply enchanting, lost in the imagery of your write, very splendidly done. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is such beautiful imagery Liz, you took me there to such a lovely place. Wonderful write. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Excellent is thy middle name. *L* Sy |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
This should be on a plaque at every zoo and nature center that have eagle exhibits... very nice Liz.. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Elizabeth: This is transporting! I felt like an eagle on the wind, myself. you have such a gift! I hope you are publishing in some of the small press magazines, or better yet that you are compiling a book. If you do, I would love to buy a copy. Betty Lou Hebert |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
This flowed so smoothly and beautifully thanks for sharing keep up the good work |
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