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Pieces of Something
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Pieces of Something |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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I ramble in my mind, pieces of something Does the runner in you trot on solid ground or merely run in place on sinking sand do you fear the dark of yourself, or it a simple manner for which you have come to accept a different love, a different feeling, different I grow from the wounds of desire and reach for a shadow that doesn’t follow me, yet plays hide and seek I wanted happiness in my life a room of sunshine, but have failed in the storms of passing times that lay heavy upon my heart I have loved you for so long that I can hear you breathing from here and when your eyes close mine close as well I am too young to feel this tired and too old to start over but my spirit in its humble light offers me some kind of hope I look back upon yesterday and all I see is the five year old that skinned her knee and cried when the bandage was removed I feel safer knowing that one day my soul will pass through yours and once again I will know comfort [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-12-2001).] |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Wow! This is amazing and so full of talent. You are very creative.  Sauni Sauni :) |
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darabeth Junior Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 33 |
Very lovely poem!I truly enjoy reading your work as always.Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Dara Beth |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am not quite sure how to comment on this one, as I feel "you" are to young to feel that old for sure, and and you are "never" too old to start again, I have done it 3 times. But...I also hear the hope that your gentle spirit will find a place to reconcile until two hearts and spirits meld as one. I loved this poem as the emotion you conveyed I am sure many can identify with, great job! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
do you fear the dark of yourself, or it a simple manner for which you have come to accept ====================== I grow from the wounds of desire and reach for a shadow that doesn’t follow me, ============================ but have failed in the storms of passing times that lay heavy upon my heart I have loved you for so long that I can hear you breathing from here and when your eyes close mine close as well I am too young to feel this tired and too old to start over but my spirit in its humble light offers me some kind of hope ============================ I feel safer knowing that one day my soul will pass through yours and once again I will know comfort ===================================== you havent failed anything or anyone.. youre right where you need be...right where you should be... its all part of a process, stages of growth the rest comes with time, and healing, and writing... I felt every line of this beautiful flowing sincere emote as if written on my skin... for sure..engraved on my heart  meshe grabs her magazines she packs her things and she goes she leaves the pictures hanging on the wall, she burns all her notes and she knows ... she's been here too few years to feel this old ~MB20~ Did you make it to the Milky Way, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ 'I grow from the wounds of desire and reach for a shadow that doesn’t follow me, yet plays hide and seek' Your contemplations are executed with such depth of feeling. my spirit in its humble light offers me some kind of hope' Be as young in years as in your spirit~  *Hugs* and Happy Mother's Day, sweet lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lauren, A very introspective and lovely piece. I think many of us can relate to this, my friend. Thanks Michael Proust- |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed we all can relate. . . but I have one question. . . pieces of what? excellent Lauren. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I relate 100%. Well done, thanks for this one. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Excellently written, Lauren...when I read this, I thought of the same exact lines from the Matchbox Twenty song that JM quoted...wonderful expression of such a lonely feeling...I like this a lot! sp  to be with you... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Saunni~ My many thanks to you for such a kind reply...  darabeth~ Wow, thanks for the compliment, it brings a smile to my face.... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Mysteria~ I amy not be to old to start over, but I sure feel it some days....thank you for your reply, I hold it close..hugs to you....  Janet Marie~ You are golden, and your reply engraved on my heart....time can be a precious thing, sometimes I just vent, wishing time would move a little faster..hugs to you.. Marge~ My spirit is indeed young, and thank you for reminding me....hugs to you.... Michael~ I am always touched by the way you respond, Thank you....hugs to you..... Sven~ Just pieces of my rambling mind, thanks for taking time to read the jumbled words...I appreciate you so.... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World Is Ever Really Lost All Things Beloved Live on In Our Hearts...Forever." [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-13-2001).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
walker~ thank you for relating, I appreciate you stopping by to read.....hugs to you... snowpants~ thanks so much..... I appreciate your kind reply....hugs to you... With much gratitude.....Greeneyes~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World Is Ever Really Lost All Things Beloved Live on In Our Hearts...Forever." [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-13-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
sure, yesterday I felt like just running away from the entire family, down the street and around the corner and to the park........that is so foolish, I enjoyed reading this, it made me think! Kathleen Blake |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren, we are never to old to learn or to old to grow......with time all things are as they should be. May your heart be filled with peace dear friend. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading your poem Greeneyes...James |
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