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SelfJupiter New Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1 |
Hello..im new here..a few of my friends from a previous InsideTheWeb poetry board said this place is highly recommended. Although my style can completely be myriad, unorthodox and downright strange at times. I really do hope you can get past that and give me some honest feedback to help me improve. This one right here I wrote with the help of a special child Whom I have had the pleasure of working with in a After School Mentors program over here at our local elementary school..He's really coming around. I may have edited this and directed the channel of energy and imagination. But im giving him FULL credit. HE did the work. So I share this with you. To all my friends. Who know who you are. Please..respond here and i will respond back at an according date.thank you souls fly by laeving cold winds that cant touch air flying by leaving moments to stare wondering if days lost are moments needed would still be here only if youd heeded proper uses lead to misuse stanzas written unheard are abused silent poets emerge from muddy waters with clean souls and it's always a story you've never heard that you seem to know mysteries seem mysterious when the problem is solved and love... well love was never around breaking hearts and broken promise leading to stairs leading to nowhere round and round while darker it grows... cold... |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Self Jupiter, I have missed you!  What a wonderful thing to do, working with this young man. Very well done indeed.I will enjoy reading your work again. Kellie "I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry.... This is indeed an outstanding place to meander about. I look forward to reading from your collective myriad... Check your email for a special greeting...  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wondering if days lost are moments needed would still be here only if youd heeded proper uses lead to misuse stanzas written unheard are abused silent poets emerge from muddy waters with clean souls and it's always a story you've never heard that you seem to know ==================== this is very cool...deep and soulful very cool title... Welcome to Poetry Land, nice to have you here. I look forward to more of your work... and dont worry about your "style"... everyone here loves poetry, has an open mind...and tis kind  jm "Nature's first green is gold, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Um, something about the line "silent poets emerge from muddy waters" is quite intriguing... Welcome to Passions! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I could reiterate all statements above, but I have to say that Sunshine was captivated by the same line that grabbed my attention ever so greatly. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I'm sorry I wasn't around when this was first posted, Jupiter! I love the way it reads, I'm impressed! I see you've been doing great things with great little people! *Hugs* So good to see you here! ~Tier{R.T.} |
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