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Tears Fears and Othr Things
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Tears Fears and Othr Things |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite Tears Fears and Other Things Our peers grow wisdom, tear by tear Through fears and through their passing years Facilitate their growing old By being bold and taking hold. They sooth their gruff and agitate By smoother passage of the freight. The mad of sad the ploy of joy The bare and wear of their employ. It is an ocean that we see Each wave of new that comes to be Each separate splash upon the shore. Drags away some sand in store. It hangs about us weighted dear About our neck a lavaliere We show a cloths line in the sun Of all the wash a heart has done This thickened blood within our bowl The blood that drains our visions goal. We drink in tears of life crop Drop by drop it drains nonstop. We simmer in this soups insane Till genesis becomes germane. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Seymour, You show an awesome control over words and find the most emphatic way of putting across thoughts into wonderful lines of poetry... This is another one of the many examples... regards, sudhir |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
You command the reader at will with measured lines, and at the end, one is breathless. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It hangs about us weighted dear About our neck a lavaliere We show a cloths line in the sun Of all the wash a heart has done This thickened blood within our bowl The blood that drains our visions goal. We drink in tears of life crop Drop by drop it drains nonstop. We simmer in this soups insane Till genesis becomes germane. ================================ your mastery of clever vocabulary is second only to your mastery of cadence and inner rhyme. So many witty and wise anologys here Sy .. "It hangs about us weighted dear About our neck a lavaliere" and how cool is that line...waaay cool  ahhhhhh .. to frolic barefoot in that poetic mind of yours. *winkiewinkie*  oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Julian, Comming from you just made my day. Sudhir, Thank you my friend. JM, Don't let Randy catch you barefoot. LOL Winkiewinkie, Love ya |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
read it once, grow entranced read it twice, begin the dance read it thrice, know words deep in quarter time, lulls me sleep sing the trilogy O Sy of song and carry me all your way along [sorry, you inspired it! I know it's not worthy, but it is all I have....] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I always enjoy your philosophical ruminations, Seymour. This one is strong. (o: Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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tradewind Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 101 |
your poetic talent comes across loud and clear in this poem wonderful command of language |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, I loved it. *L* Meadow, Thank you Claire. *L* Tradewind, A very nice coment, thank you. |
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