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Open Poetry #13

Melancholy (acrostic)

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-05-09 05:10 PM

Melancholy (acrostic)

Murk has surrounded
Enveloping it’s gloom
Lowering it’s weight
Another turn at doom
Nibbling at a heart
Chipping at a soul
Held down in darkness
Oblivious to it’s toll
Lament is it’s song
Yearning for blue to let go

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2001-05-09 05:58 PM

well done helen. . . I really like the form of this. . . it's a good representation of the feelings here. . .

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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2001-05-09 06:03 PM

A nice Acrostic, and very well expressed.

Maree

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-05-09 06:05 PM

A good job and good poem. Joyce

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-05-09 08:32 PM

sometimes a difficult form to work with I think I'll try one tomorrow!

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

5 posted 2001-05-10 06:47 PM

"Another turn at doom"
Great line! Like some kind of chilling, black game.
And a good acrostic too, girl. Yours work better than my strained attempts.
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Krawdad
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