Open Poetry #13 |
By The Grace of Elbereth |
PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
O Elbereth Gilthoniel Since beginning of time "Silivren penna miriel" In the music of your mind Awaken yon children firstborn Let the stars of your own creating And the call of Orome’s horn Stir them who lay beside Cuivienen Remain in their hearts to keep As the first light ever beheld When arisen from timeless sleep By your gift that broke the spell Enter starlight into their dreaming eyes For they will forever hold it there And captured within, will eternal shine Along with starlight spun in hair Eldamar beckons in the undying west Many will heed the summons, Many will tire of the quest For the journey is wearisome And some will love Arda’s delights, Of beasts and flowers and trees Below your unending starlight, And to the wide and haunting sea The magic voice of Ulmo’s waves Shall eventually come to call And in time before Man as they fade, So shall journey, one and all To Valinor ever eternal To be with you, queen of the stars Lover of bliss nocturnal To Valinor where you are Countless joys and unnumbered tears Ever hopeful in the face of fear Immortal queen that shall always hear Cries in starlight years To blessed land they go Then shall wake on the ‘morrow Those that shall always know, The greatest happiness, and the deepest sorrow In the land sundered from death, O Gilthoniel, Elbereth |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
.....Wow.....I liked this very much Did you make this up or was it inspired from a book? Either way...wow... SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
may Elbereth live on in the hearts and minds of those who seek truth. . . well done Knight. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Remain in their hearts to keep As the first light ever beheld When arisen from timeless sleep By your gift that broke the spell Enter starlight into their dreaming eyes For they will forever hold it there And captured within, will eternal shine Along with starlight spun in hair Eldamar beckons in the undying west Many will heed the summons, Many will tire of the quest For the journey is wearisome And some will love Arda’s delights, Of beasts and flowers and trees Below your unending starlight, And to the wide and haunting sea ==================== PK, this is a very impressive level of inspire ... the imagery and vocab are masterfully done, the whole premise is clever,unique,and creative. the cadence and rhyme flow is perfect and this was a pleasure to read aloud. very well done poet sir. "Nature's first green is gold, |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I take my hat of to you, I great piece of sword and sorcery, very stylish, this would nestle in easily with Howard and Moorcock. I enjoyed it very much. Regards, Olias. "High in dark, ghost haunted tower Zukala sits a dream". |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
PoeticKnight, really enjoyed this much. This is my kind of writing... What was your inspiration. Parker |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks guys...Tolkien is my favorite author. This is mostly about The Silmarillion though...a must read. [This message has been edited by PoeticKnight (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is absolutely breathtaking.... Thank you so very much for sharing your gifts! |
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