navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #13 » Far Above the Clouds...
Open Poetry #13
Post A Reply Post New Topic Far Above the Clouds... Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
snowpants
Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS

0 posted 2001-05-06 10:50 PM




far above the clouds,
the words I want to say to you hide from me....
down here, afloat the dynamic waves of the sea,
expression eludes me in such a desperate fashion...

well below the mist,
sighs illicitly escape the confines of my secret thoughts...
up above, flying along with my concentration,
my ability to gather any other thoughts stays out of my reach...

between the defining shapes of the haze,
the nonexistence of loneliness continues to inundate me...
right before my eyes,
the purpose to my life comes into view through your eyes...

-kh 05/06/01

*thanks, JM for the pic and the "challenge"...


to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

© Copyright 2001 snowpants - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
1 posted 2001-05-06 11:01 PM


SnowPants~
Just LOVELY !

The poem soars ... the graphic rocks !

Way cool is that inspiring chick - JanetMarie !

Ya' done good !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-07 08:35 AM


down here, afloat the dynamic waves of the sea,
expression eludes me in such a desperate fashion...

well below the mist,
sighs illicitly escape the confines of my secret thoughts...
up above, flying along with my concentration,
my ability to gather any other thoughts stays out of my reach...
===========================


Ahhh my friend..ya spoil me  
and your welcome...and thank you  
I knew you could do this one justice...
its such a cool pic...
gotta love that webshots  
love the vocab and phrasing in this one,
Soooo... If I send ya a pic a week??
ooops....sorry....confused me with the teach  
well done poetess of the snow  

you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive

~Sarah McLachlan~

Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
3 posted 2001-05-07 12:34 PM


Wow, I loved the picture and the poem....brilliant presentation!!

Nathan

Sven
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2001-05-07 01:08 PM


quote:
the nonexistence of loneliness continues to inundate me...


I love this line. . . and this poem. . . excellent sp. . .  

--------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Interloper
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369
Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-05-07 01:10 PM


And a wonderful view it is, too

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


snowpants
Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
6 posted 2001-05-07 05:52 PM


Marge:  thank you so much!  glad you liked this...yes, JM is very 'cool'...

JM:  hey you...that was a great pic to work with...thank you again...a pic a week, eh??  just make sure the Teach doesn't have any "assignments" for me... ...but, that would be fun, cuz sometimes it takes a butt kickin' to get me moving sometimes, and the graphics that you find are amazing, so, bring it on, m'friend...thanks for your wonderful compliments, too...glad you approve!!     

Nate:  thank you!  I am happy you liked this!!  

Sven:  thanks...that's one of my fave lines, too...glad you liked it!  

Interloper:  indeed it is...thanks so much!  

sp  

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-05-08 09:23 PM


wow and thank you!!!!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Saunni
Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777
West Virginia
8 posted 2001-05-12 07:12 PM


Cool! So cool! The title I just love and the picture also. Such a great write!  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Just A Woman
Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507

9 posted 2001-05-12 07:53 PM


I applaud, especially your ending!  Wonderful.  I love your latest work.  

"I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one."

snowpants
Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
10 posted 2001-05-13 09:14 AM


Kathleen:  why thanks!  I'm happy you liked it!  

Saunni:  thank you so much!  I didn't expect to see this again!  I appreciate your kind reply!  

JAW:  I am flattered by your applause...it's wonderful to know how much other poets enjoy my work!  thanks so much!  

sp  

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #13 » Far Above the Clouds...

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary