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Adam |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Cut my lip on yellow apple My eyes wide, spread, open, close To sin of man and cry of God River red lay down its path From my seed the world will shine From a drop the world will drown The severed tree rocks me gently The blood, the root, redeem one day In my slumber, the apple ripens The promise, gift, in its turn For all that’s new and that is dead It’s ash to ash; I course your veins The Son of man, the Son of God The withered life, the bole of grace Basins, yellow, apples fill The red river, now turned blue Learn from me; burn off me Claim your sin and lay ‘fore God I was simple; I am dead You have chance, eternal life |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good, Walt! Nicely done! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I like this Walty Very good  Maree |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Wonderful write, walt... I like it muchly...  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful to read the depth in this piece Walt, very nicely written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Very well put! I especially like the last stanza! Your arsenal of poetry is very diverse. ilike, ilike  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I love the wordings and powerful phrases you use in here man, especially "from a drop the world will drown." That one was just amazing... Very good job on the whole thing. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you guys for the oomphs and aahs |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Pretty awesome here guy...pretty awesome indeed |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
My oldest son's name is Adam, we call him Adam Apple.....I enjoyed this Kathleen Blake |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Liked this a lot Walt! There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellently written... Walt... regards, sudhir |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Wanted to say thank you o yuh o yuh! |
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