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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Run Around.....from #10 Run with me around, around the plum tree and through the fence into the vacant lot across the tall grass… I will hide my laughter in a walnut and throw it, throw it across the asphalt, and who I am will bounce and break across my future, my breath the rocket catapulting the days where love blooms and children hold my skirt, into the garden with the rake of commitment you and I. Don’t tell me of the girl, the one with blue eyes, the one with long blond hair, or the mornings of mourning when the sun didn’t ever come up and light was just a shadow and you were lost in it in a place you made to keep me out. Don’t tell me forever or touch my face like listening wind, if you had to clean the plate of all the sunny side ups I would still see the mashed potatoes and the broken dish laying against the cold floor of broken promises. Tell me my eyes are jewels and you will wear them while you can, you will tuck them inside your shirt and if you should want to hold me I will touch your heart there and all the fine pieces of us will break into tomorrow, for it isn’t easy, is it to lay out the future and the path winds, it winds sometimes to no where. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tell me my eyes are jewels and you will wear them while you can, you will tuck them inside your shirt and if you should want to hold me I will touch your heart there and all the fine pieces of us will break into tomorrow, for it isn’t easy, is it to lay out the future and the path winds, it winds sometimes to no where. ================================ your eyes ARE jewels that see with poetic vision!! "I will touch your heart there and all the fine pieces of us will break into tomorrow," see....I rest my case   meoh you speak to me in riddles |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Darn it! I still want to write like you..... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I felt the sadness of some memories ... 'and the path winds, it winds sometimes to no where.' ... yet mixed with the ink of the beauty in your pen 'I will hide my laughter in a walnut and throw it, throw it across the asphalt, and who I am will bounce and break across my future, my breath the rocket catapulting the days where love blooms and children hold my skirt, into the garden with the rake of commitment you and I.' Love n'*hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Martie! I love how you weave such incredible descriptions to bring the reader into your thoughts and visions ... you are an amazing poet, this is a wonderful piece!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, As usual, well written and full of what you do best...imagery. :-) Sorry, couldn't resist. Good work. Michael Proust- |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your poetry just is ....just so fine!! Kathleen Blake |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Perfection! Plain and simple. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--Yes your honor. Karilea--and I wasnt to write like you. Kit--such a compliment from you makes me smile...thank you. Michael--Thank you for you sweet response. Kathleen--thank you for the fine reply. Myseria--I appreciate your reply, but I don't think perfection is in me. I'm glad you liked my poem. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--How did I miss thanking you for your wonderful response to this poem...I'm so sorry sister of my heart...You know I love you!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
That dancing baby made me forget what I was going to say...Ha! Loved this! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
or the mornings of mourning when the sun didn’t ever come up and light was just a shadow and you were lost in it in a place you made to keep me out. I kept copying my favorite portions... and then realized I'd just repeated your entire poem. *S* "mornings of mourning"... What an incredible phrase... what a tough phase to get through so that laying out the future becomes possible, even if never easy. This is stunning, Martie! |
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tradewind Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 101 |
Martie, wow, this is packed with such unique descriptions and images, wonderful work! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I agree with Janet Marie and Kaeilea- every single word - and mosot of all of these - I want to write with your poetic vision!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--what a babe! JLR--Me too tradwind...thank you so much for your kind reply. Bill--Thanks for always being so sweet. |
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