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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-05-03 12:02 PM


Sometimes in the dark like this
I get a desire for you like this
Want to feel, want to feel your kiss
Don’t want to lose out on so much bliss

Things I need to learn so much
Have to feel, to feel your touch
Never will it be too much
Gracing me with your saving touch

With you I know all
With you when darkness falls
I don’t heed anyone else’s call
Time to stop, time to end it all

I need to stop it fast
Need to make this moment last

© Copyright 2001 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
1 posted 2001-05-03 12:09 PM


One nearly always wants to hang on to those wondrous moments. Well expressed PK
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-03 01:36 PM


Things I need to learn so much
Have to feel, to feel your touch
Never will it be too much
Gracing me with your saving touch

With you I know all
With you when darkness falls
I don’t heed anyone else’s call
Time to stop, time to end it all
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ya know this is moth poem just waiting to happen *L*

beautiful poetic phrasing and express of longing and desire PK...
your poetry at is best in my humble opinion.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-05-03 02:30 PM


Um, Janet Marie has it quite right...a lot of intense feeling here...it speaks well...
inot2B
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since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205
Arkansas
4 posted 2001-05-03 02:40 PM


When the darkness falls over New Orleans those feeling just take hold. Beautiful write.
JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

5 posted 2001-05-03 03:08 PM


If only we could stop the moments...and stay right there.
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