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Captivated {Choka}
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Captivated {Choka} |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii 
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 lightning’s blue white flash brightens night sky with fireworks complete with thunder reflections of fire light flickers in your ember eyes in magnetic attraction the voice of the storm echoes boldly through canyons as squall line arrives secure in your loving arms desires inflame as you whisper in my ear summer surrenders electrically persuaded fall starts with a bang the touch of your lips on mine hearts beating in sync electrifying passions inevitably fall proclaims it’s full intent trees moan in the wind entwined together as one rapturous moment crying out that I love you a distant thunder rain falls softly on the roof blanketed by clouds  Choka575-757-575 by Koko October 2000 Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I love this Koko!!  *sigh*. . . nothing like having a storm inside to rival the storm outside. . .  wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very descriptive of two kind of storms. Joyce |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
as someone who loves a good thunderstorm, and Lord knows we have them here in Indiana, I really got into this poem! Kathleen Blake |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Whee! Up until the time I read this poem, I didn't particularly enjoy thunder and lightning storms. I may move to Indiana...or perhaps not on second thought. Terrific writing. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
I truly appreciate everyone's comments on this choka. I find the choka a delightful form of oriental poetry to express a mixture of nature and romance such as this and am working on writing some more in this form. The haiku, tanka abd choka forms have become my favorite, perrhaps because of living in an oriental culture in Hawaii. Yes, the ambience of a rainstorm is quite romantic in my opinion Julian,I can thank you for re-inspiring me to the choka form by your own marvelous recent post in it. Thanks to all for reading this piece andtaking the time to comment. Aloha! Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I love a good storm, this was a wonderful read....thank you...be well... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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