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Open Poetry #13

The Eddy Effect

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2001-05-01 04:11 PM

The Eddy Effect

She has seen you
only in shadows,
a spiraling, concaved
guise of self,
one of many.

She hungers for more
than this sisterly love,
she wants to experience
the lover in you.

Dodging her desires
as best you can,
trying to keep it friendly,
you are, after all
dependent on her.

A maddening,
nonreciprocal cycle,
your wish for freedom,
her schemes
to make you stay.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

Mabel A. Dilley
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

1 posted 2001-05-01 04:14 PM

My goodness. This was both wonderfully written and very powerfilled. You know how to write the perfect poem: intricate and exacting, producing a snapshot in time.

"I am not now that which I have been."

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

2 posted 2001-05-01 04:14 PM

sweet little sixteen more than a friend? o yuh!

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-05-01 04:53 PM

This is nice. I don't understand fully, but I don't need to to appreciate the poetry. Joyce

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

4 posted 2001-05-01 06:22 PM

Julian, you are too kind, thank you!

Walt - you nut!

Joyce - thank you!

Corinne

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

5 posted 2001-05-01 06:53 PM

I know this lady, I think I even dated her.

Park

walker
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since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

6 posted 2001-05-01 07:08 PM

Great poem!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-05-01 07:56 PM

I really enjoyed these lines, wow, Corinne, nice job.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

8 posted 2001-05-02 12:42 PM

Well, there certainly is intrigue behind that half smiled squint! Very interesting piece. Enjoyed it.

S Arthur

Whose Night is this, Mine or the Moon's?
J.E.James

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