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Stroke of Midnight
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Stroke of Midnight |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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This may be a repost... If so, please forgive the unintentional redundancy. *S* Stroke of Midnight The music stops and I look around Wondering at the cessation of sound, Alarmed to find myself all alone - The object of pity now that you've gone. I'd been so happy, caught up in the dance Reflecting your smile, enjoying the chance To simply be near someone I love so That happy character just didn't know A forever friendship had such limitations. Now turmoil and hurt replace jubilation And I crumple, defeated, for all to see You didn't find anything special in me. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you and I have so much in common......this just zapped my heart.....I know just how this feels......Suthern, this is amazing.....( and I don't care if it is a repost, it's going in my library!)  SEAIf I let you into my heart..... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"You didn't find anything special in me." This says a lot...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'd been so happy, caught up in the dance Reflecting your smile, enjoying the chance To simply be near someone I love so That happy character just didn't know ======================= there is NADA.. nothing...redundant about your work... unless you want to take into account that redundant can also mean consistant.... and then we can talk about the perfect consistancy of your cadence and rhyme flow... and then we will talk about the way your words touch and play at the heartstrings... and how you so often mirror our own emotions in your poetic purges... and we always find quiet comfort in knowing we're not alone.... so OK... I guess you could say this was redundant  hugs Ruthie-girl. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhSweetSuthernGal~ I felt the Prince standing on the stairway to the palace with Cinderella's glass slipper in his hand ... What superb imagery you brought to mind ~ Love n' *Hugs* a'plenty !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern--If this is redundant then I think you should be redundant more often...and all the rest that JM said...this is great! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
you can do that???? I mean you can get forgiveness for unintentional redundancy? *hits her forehead* sheesh why hadn't anyone told me this?????? *really expecting an answer look* no really lady...you write with such honesty...no matter how muhc one might 'want' if it is not mutual, then...well you said it best...great write lady |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is great writing... suthern... Regards, Sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
SEA: I'm sorry you relate so well... for rejection isn't fun to live through (and often seems terminal *S*) But thank you so much for your kind comments... you honor me. *S* JamesMichael: kinda says it all, hunh? *G* Thank you for reading. Janet Marie: Can I hire you to do my PR work for me? LOL. I think it may be stretching things a bit to equate redundancy with consistency. LOL. But thank you, dear lady, for your gracious compliments. They're greatly appreciated. Marge: The trouble is, he was looking past me with a shoe sized to fit another. *S* Lousy luck and terrible timing strike again. LOL. Thank you so much, dear friend! Martie: Yanno, that's almost a ditto... LOL. Have you been talking with jellybeans the ditto queen? LOL. Thank you very much, kind lady. jellybeans: I know I've been holding out on you cause it's just so much fun to harass you. *G* But you can get forgiveness for almost anything, Sybil dear. *G* Thank you, dear friend... I'm glad you like this... and yes, it does take mutual wanting to have anything but dreams turning to dust. Sudhir: Thank you so much! I appreciate you reading! *S* |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very well done Suthern... has a very nice feel to it Jamie |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
then this person must have been blind suthern. . . wonderful poem. . . I know these words. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Suthern ... you just 'bout tore my heart out on that last line! Excellent emotive writing ... so very sad, but beautifully done! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Jamie: Thank you so much! *S* Sven: Some are... but unfortunately, it's all too easy to see only through their eyes. *S* Thank you! Kit: Now you be careful with that kind heart of yours, dear lady! *S* Thank you so much... your response means a lot to me. *S* |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
3 little quatrains - but they spoke with such force - I felt nailed to my chair - I'm saving this one - a true treasure! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, Wilfred... your kind words really made my day. *S* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I wonder how the term cam about "stroke of midnight" but I don't know. I do know I love this!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o you are jsut begging to be smacked when you say things like i am not special. hehehe you gotta know you are o yuh |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Irish Rose: I'm glad you liked! *S* Thank you! wow: Shhhhhhhhhhhh.... *G* Don't you be tellin' what I'm begging! LOL. Thank you for reading. *S* (As for knowing... there's special... and then there's special to a particular person. *S*) |
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