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Rendezvous (Tanka) |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia 
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Rendezvous amongst moon shadow moors of misty fog Behold the beauty of twilight amourous lips braze entwining two souls April 28 200l © Kathy Harmon Edit thanks to Alan's information. Here is the new one in 5-7-5-7-7 amongst moon shadows moors beckon the misty fog In twilight beauty amourous lips lightly braze entwining two lonely souls -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat [This message has been edited by kitkat (edited 04-29-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KitKat~ What stunningly beautiful thoughts. Greatly enjoyed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sounds interesting...James |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think you misunderstand the Tanka format... it works in syllables, and it goes 5-7-5-7-7. Still, a nice poem, Tanka or not.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Great poem! I too am learning.LP |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Thank-you Marge . Glad you enjoyed this James--The moors are an interesting place Alan thanks for the information--Think I got it a bit mixed up with Haikus latin passion-learning is always fun. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kath, the vocabulary and imagery in this is excellent... you created a mystic, enticing, romantic, scene with your well chosen, yet succinct words.. which defines a successful Tanka, Haiku or Senryu cool title and theme... well done poetess There are two lasting bequests |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kitkat - this is most precious and says much, with few words. BC |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Both versions are wonderful KitKat ... beautiful sentiments, I really enjoyed these! Best wishes, /Kit |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Wonderful, descriptive and very well written thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Wonderful Tanka, love it very much Charisma |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Again I say Thank-you. Your kind words inspire me to look into new ways of creating my feelings and images I have in my head. -------------- |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh, I didn't expect you to go and rewrite it!  I must say, I like the edit a thousand times more. You added a few different words and tweaked the wording to make this a true success, very well done. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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