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Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-04-27 05:06 PM

Falling

even though
there had been a backseat
that was not
good enough for me,
so it
waited until

after the white

but I should have known

should have listened

should have seen it in your eyes

that even though
you had given me one
night of Hearst Castle

where dreams should
have been real

we slowly eclipsed to
a room by the
racetrack

as the money
dwindled down

and laying back,
I gazed up
and saw where a mirror
had once been
bracketed
directly overhead

but I should have known

should have listened

should have seen it in your eyes

your taking me first to
where I belonged
than to a place where your
real self
resided

I did not belong there

where there was no
curtain for the shower

and the smell of last night’s
victory

held on

I should have known

should have listened

should have seen it in your eyes

pride goeth before a fall

I fell too far.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2001-04-27 05:10 PM

Oh, I hope you ran fast. Love, Joyce

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

2 posted 2001-04-27 05:43 PM

Sometimes we know and still won't listen to what we know would be a mistake.

My best,
Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-04-27 06:46 PM

Wow. Sorry. Both venues can be "right" with the "right" person

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

PortuguesePoet
Junior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 34

4 posted 2001-04-27 06:48 PM

Should have listened...I think not...only one sure way to learn in this life...FALL....

Stunning work.....look forward to seeing more.

Tessa
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 67
Ohio

5 posted 2001-04-27 07:05 PM

Ouch. You write with a gentle honesty that's quite touching. I enjoyed, Lady In White

Amuse_mi
Member

since 2001-04-22

Posts 110

6 posted 2001-04-27 07:50 PM

Hey, I resemble this! Beautiful work.

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

7 posted 2001-04-27 09:30 PM

Old Pennsylvania Dutch expression:
"We grow too soon old and too late smart"
I like how you expressed it much better

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2001-04-28 01:02 AM

After the fact hurts, but always a lesson is learned...great piece.

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Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-04-28 11:18 AM

it's the fall that always teaches the lesson. . . I've always asked if we could learn the lesson without the fall. . . *sigh*. . . it just doesn't work that way. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

10 posted 2001-04-28 11:36 PM

Lady In White - such a story that you tell, a heart that was torn perhaps. But smile, as tomorrow will come, and with it the beautiful dawn of another day.

BC

latin passion
Senior Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 576

11 posted 2001-04-29 01:36 AM

--- I'm glad you ran, please don't look back.. you've made the right choice, LP

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