Open Poetry #13 |
She Is Like Water |
PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
She is like water That I am floating in Floating helpless upon her As the water comes seeping in Her water warm to the touch Clean and pure Her water heals so much Providing me a cure From the mortal disease For when I am wet, It’s as if my heart seized And I not born just yet While her currents may take me To many a different shore, Her love’s an endless sea, Her beauty’s as deep as the seas are She brings life to those that live And touches all who sail upon her Something beyond life she gives For that I am indebted to her She is like water That I am drowning in But I am allowing her To slowly take me in |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This is very warm indeed...enjoyed... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
....shhh....I'm pretending this is for me.....shhh...... |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
This one I really like. You know I wrote something regarding a similar theme. But have not posted yet. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Lady, thank you. Walker, I'd like to see yours. SEA, shhhhh...I won't tell, if you won't. *S* |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ohhhh shhhh thanks PK..... you are so fun! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Her water warm to the touch Clean and pure Her water heals so much Providing me a cure From the mortal disease For when I am wet, It’s as if my heart seized And I not born just yet While her currents may take me To many a different shore, ================= Something beyond life she gives For that I am indebted to her ================ LOL@ Sea....arent we all... arent we all (even the ones he wrote 10 years ago) and this beauty is like floating on a sailboat , being rocked to sleep by the waves and the warm sun on ones skin... lovely poetic comparisons and imagery PK. |
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PortuguesePoet Junior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 34 |
While her currents may take me To many a different shore, Nice line this one.... I liked this poem..Makes me think of my wife...I'm in portugal shes in south africa....hope she gets here soon. Thanks for The Beautiful poem. |
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Tessa Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 67Ohio |
The ending to this is stunning! Perfect! |
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Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
This reminds me of the essence of a mother's womb. |
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