Tribute to the Invisibles (Part I)

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La Matadora
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since 2001-04-25

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0 posted 2001-04-26 08:54 PM

Tribute to the Invisibles (Part I)

I just can't imagine that world of pain
of broken down houses
and fire stealing your breath
And I can't see the darkness
that's keeping you down
and showing the sweetness of death

But then I remember the shouts
and the screams
and the tears I always hid in my heart
Where the bruises received
mirrored shattered glass dreams
and I was frozen and lost to the dark

It stands all too clear in my
mind what you know, and I
say 'Princess, be strong.'
Let them not see your pain
give them nothing to gain
and the darkness will last only so long

"Our time is like a dance of death whose uncanny rhythm is understood by few. Everyone whirls confusedly without seeing the abyss." - Countess Ballestrem-Solf, 1948

[This message has been edited by La Matadora (edited 04-26-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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1 posted 2001-04-26 08:57 PM

This was great. I especially love the sense of hope given at the end. Very well done here Matadora....

By the way- Love the alias

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Joyce Johnson

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2 posted 2001-04-26 09:12 PM

Good poem. I understand it to be about abuse? If so I am sorry that such things happen. Joyce

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-04-29 11:11 AM

This is a mirror image of me, in the past, but no more!

Write more.........welcome to the forum

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

latin passion
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4 posted 2001-04-29 11:23 AM

My spanish blood soars, to hear your pain, when it should be filled with passion. I too sense abuse in your writings, that no should have to endure.

Sunshine

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5 posted 2001-04-29 11:53 AM

Welcome to Passions!

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-04-29 11:59 AM

But then I remember the shouts
and the screams
and the tears I always hid in my heart
Where the bruises received
mirrored shattered glass dreams
and I was frozen and lost to the dark
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Let them not see your pain
give them nothing to gain
and the darkness will last only so long
=======================

This is touching and beautifully tradgic
your rhyme scheme and cadence is excellent
the emotions expressed reach deep.
Welcome to Passions...
your entrance make a strong poetic first impression.
I look forward to part 2 and also more of your work.
take care
jm

"Though my soul may sit in darkness,
It will arise in perfect light.
For I have loved the stars too fondly ...
To be fearful of the night"
~author unknown~

There are two lasting bequests
that we can hope to instill in our children
one is roots ...
the other ... wings.

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