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Open Poetry #13

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

0 posted 2001-04-25 04:05 PM

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Below deck,
Where teak wears no varnish,
And space spares no pretense;
Hips
And other such truths
Brush against
On their way to the head.

RMW

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-04-25 04:10 PM

Vivid! Really feel the cramped space and the urgency of the trip.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-04-25 07:36 PM

whew...all hands on deck *L*

so much said in so few words...
way cool poem...
clever employ of imagery and succinctity
well done.

Though my soul may sit in darkness,
It will arise in perfect light.
For I have loved the stars too fondly ...
To be fearful of the night.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

3 posted 2001-04-25 07:44 PM

Not much can be hidden under those circumstances!

Cor

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-04-25 09:37 PM

there's a lot going on here. . . well written. . .

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RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-04-26 09:38 AM

Virginia, Janet Marie, and Corinne....Thank you for taking a moment to comment. Bob

Sven...As always, your remarks are too kind. Bob

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