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Fog |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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This was to be a sonnet - I intended to edit it - until it 'fit' the rules but I let my muse see it - I decided to 'go' with my muse's edits - as is - I like it too much to change it further Fog has puffed out in the yard like cow’s breath In the inky sky the moon shines on it Our day’s work done we relax in our death Cool humid air invades our sanctuary auras halo round the candle sconces Hypnotized I watch the slow gradual beauty Your hands turn down lace coverlet white shimmer simmering your silk Gradually we touch, untangling tensions of our day your scent warming as your body breathes Swarming my senses, reeling me in As fly-like I fall again into my Venus Trapped in your love The first duty of love is to listen. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Why cannot my muse touch me like this...it is a wonderful read. Keep your muse happy, as this suits you very well. |
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Kay Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 70 |
very hypnotic this one I truly was enthralled by it from the first line. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow. One of your best here, Bill. It has it all. Cor |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very good. Joyce |
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Blaec Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 130The Sunshine State |
Your writing is beautiful. I love this! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I often tell me editor where to go . . . (Actually, I try to keep the door locked, but sometimes she sneaks in . . .) I had never thought of fog as cow's breath! Wow! Thanks Wil, Kraw' |
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Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
I loved this. It is stunning. Such delicate work.  A.M. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've made my pastures and the bovines a beautiful place to visit... even in the fog.... well done Mr. Yeats! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Nature - be it sunrise, sunset, the mountains, the shore, clear skies or foggy are all part of life I love - I'm glad you found value in this - thank you |
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