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A Note Hidden in a Nightgown
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A Note Hidden in a Nightgown |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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it doesn't take a genius to figure this one out you say "she" is a sick friend well that I really doubt a whispered conversation upon the telephone that low cut satin dress of yours that used to make me moan packed in your overnight case you didn't think I'd see with scented oils and nightgown that you once shared with me well when you leave, guess what dear I'll change the locks tonight don't bother to come back here and don't forget to write |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
whoops! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Well good for you. Well done. Joyce |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
I wish more people were this definitive with their decisions. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Oh ouch........a very painful write. I feel such an overwhelming sadness after reading this. Life should not be as this......
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
"well when you leave, guess what dear I'll change the locks tonight don't bother to come back here and don't forget to write" Hey at least you let her know she can stay gone, but you'd still accept her letters. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you everyone for responding.....actually this was a fun, tongue in cheek write about having suspicions realized and what one might do in response. I pictured her after a nice romantic dinner going to slip into something sexy and finding that she can't have here cake and eat it too. The "and don't forget to write" line is a facetious phrase I use to flip someone off while I'm saying "goodbye". LOL (I really don't expect a letter when I do this.*g*) [This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-24-2001).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 Funny how some think that poetry is always reality,right Mike?  Ahh..well. We could hope for change, but then we wouldn't be writing poetry, eh?  I enjoyed this with is simply and firmly matter of factly put point at the end. Did that makes sense? I loved this. A man's simple acceptance. Haunting. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I found this absolutely hilarious! What a way to have the last word. Ingenious! |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Temptress...Some of my poems are reality, some complete and utter fantasy and some are a mixture of both. I enjoy when readers can't determine which is which because I then feel I've done a good job. You read the end exactly as I wished...simple, firm and "matter of factly". A care less attitude cuz she wasn't worth anything more. Glad you liked this one. Thank you. Tennessee Angel...So glad you got a kick out of this one. It was a very fun write. Thank you. Mike |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
aah loved the poem but it was time she left ..she wont be missed and it is a two way thing after all eh |
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