it hurts to say goodbye....(double rictameter)

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Open Poetry #13

it hurts to say goodbye....(double rictameter)

Packratmike
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since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

0 posted 2001-04-23 11:42 PM

it hurts
to say goodbye
in a cold morning mist
that softens your red burning eyes
but not the pain that's never left behind
shivering now in morning mists
i cuddle to melting
images, still
it hurts

like dew
on petals strewn
through gardens of my life
some tears have caught the morning light
some suffer through the bite of winter's frost
but now my tears for you are warmed
on petals sprinkled sweet
with memories
like dew

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-04-24 12:08 PM

still it hurts...you've written this with much emotion and strong physical description. Sadly enjoyed.

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

2 posted 2001-04-24 01:44 AM

JLR...thanks, glad you enjoyed. I wrote this today for someone I lost over 20 years ago. In many ways, she's still with me.

Mike

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2001-04-24 08:11 AM

And she's still most definately with you in this tender and touching piece Mike ... beautiful sentiments you've written, and a lovely format. Very nicely written!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-04-24 08:42 AM

I'm impressed!!!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

5 posted 2001-04-24 10:22 AM

nice poem

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

6 posted 2001-04-24 12:57 PM

Kit...she is the inspiration for many (not all) of my poems. You may see her pop up here again or if you rummage thru some of my oldies. "Yellow Roses" buried somewhere in the Open 12 forum is one of my favorites. (Actually, I feel she sometimes sits along side my muse, helping her.*S*)
Thanks for the nice remarks...glad you enjoyed this one.

Rose...I'm glad I was able to impress...thank you.*S*

vandana...glad you liked it.

"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

[This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-24-2001).]

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