Open Poetry #13 |
Rain and Paper Dolls |
Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Hard rain spills From the eyes Of drunken skies Pretty little painted people scatter Ducking for cover Under makeshift Umbrellas Made of cardboard boxes From Sears Upper-class and street walkers Soaked like store bought sponges Inside the warm walls They stand frozen Laughing out loud In perfect duplication Of Musak's rendition Of Ricky Martin "Shake your Bon Bon" Looking out storefront windows At the wet paper dolls Flailing around like Fresh caught trout Gasping for water But these fools Are little too wet For the tight white dresses And silk suits Bleeding bright colors Make up running The sky closes its mouth Sun walks in In regal fashion Wet Soaked paper dolls Stand in amazement Like people who have Never seen the likes of rain Slowly mount their BMW's And drive away Senile old men Sitting on the Bench In front of Wards Will talk of this night forever To anymore bored enough to listen But if you take a closer look At the store mannequins The smiles are etched little bigger And some say their eyes Now sparkle At the street of fools That entertained for free Just a few nights ago. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
The intended imagery held all the way through this piece, and I grasped at several to be my favorites. Finally this one stayed within my hands: "The sky closes its mouth" You took me to that bench. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Brad - you have outdone yourself... just when i think we cannot see any more talent grace these blue pages, you finally come to join us and now post this very fine piece of poetry... i love it love it love it!!! (oh, didjya know i love it?).... my favorite lines listed here..... bravo!quote: |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yep, this is very cool.... I enjoyed this one SEA |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Thank you all |
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PoeticaL Member
since 2001-03-31
Posts 50 |
ditto what doreen said and then some and oh by the way ...c'mere I want to hug you for being on my computer pages when I miss you "I'm a junkyard full of false starts....Elliot Smith" |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
You captured this moment very well. The image you created in my mind was very vivid. Thanks |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Brad, I e-mailed a response! This is too, too wonderful! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Excellent, Brad, Excellent! I especially liked "pretty little painted people scattered" Vivid scene! Krawdad |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Impecable imagery! You paint such an intimate picture for your reader. Bravo. "I am not alive enough to kill myself." - Mary Ipal |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I found the title curious...the poem impressive! Enjoyed! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Brad - I read this and then read it again. And amazing work! BC |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well shoot...for obvious reasons, I'm putting this in my library! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
!!!!! Excellent !!!!! I am speechless....this had to be my favorite of yours, and I'm going to take Sunshine's lead and add it to my library right this minute!!! Great job!!! Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
yes its me |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad I came back for this! |
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