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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Incoherent, disconnected A piece of me has fallen through Falling, drifting often weightless Until the time when I see you If I expand one more time From the void that is my heart Heaving streaks and trailing dust You just may shatter me apart If I put my arms around you Would you catch my fallen pieces In the void, you'd hear me screaming In the grip of love, releases Nakedness and disillusion When I fall from dreams I fear Enter in and cause confusion That I'd feel that you are dear On the cusp of fleeting moment A piece of me has fallen through I hear the words and fall to sleep The cliff I near, reads: "I love you." [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 04-23-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Walt~ this is SO wonderful!!  SEA |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ahhh....so sweet!!! This is good sir.  |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Truly romantic writing. Joyce |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks you guys o yuh |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Hey Walt, "This is colossal!" You are so vivid and graphic in your strength of poetry and enjoy it more than you can phathom. These, truly, my best buddy-friend, are LYRICS  Can you hear them, 'cause eye can. goto sleep and wakeup, cruz |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
my god.... "If I expand one more time From the void that is my heart Heaving streaks and trailing dust You just may shatter me apart" it's awesome.... the distance and longing expressed in lyrical phrasing.... clearly from the soul of you...... an awesome write which tears me up...... distance and longing can be beautifully painful |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm with Doreen longing and distance can be beautifully painful and you have expressed that so well Walty Maree |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank yuh's I wrote this one on the bus to school in the morning and it was a bumpy ride and quite incoherent |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful, Walt. I love seeing you in so many ways lately. Truly, your writing is wonderful. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ 'On the cusp of fleeting moment A piece of me has fallen through' I LIKE ! Bumpy bus ride, eh ? Great inspirational ride ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
You never leave disaffected |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
and the beat goes on and the beat goes on yuh yuh yuh yuh |
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