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Deserted By Love
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Deserted By Love |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia 
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She sits and stares out the window As the rain falls like tears down the glass How much she wanted him to love her How much she wanted this love to last But now as she turns, there's just emptiness No more will he be standing there Once more she is left all alone In this place where much love was once shared The fire is crackling behind her The sheepskin rug was where they once laid Two bodies entwined in such passion A place where so much love was made But now the embers just smoulder This log cabin has now lost its glow As she opens the door, a cold wind envelops her She stares disbelievingly out in the snow How on earth could he just up and leave her Oh, how her aching heart does now pine She knows that it will be such a long time Before her heart is able to shine She'll now spend some days in this cabin All alone so she can collect all her thoughts The perfect place for her to be by herself While she's feeling so much out of sorts At night she will set the table For a romantic dinner she'll make for two As she glances longingly out the window Just hoping he will come into view Suetang |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is sooooo sad, Suetang, and very well written. Very good. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Denise Thanks for your kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.....Sue Suetang |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
lots of sadness expressed here. hopefully the subject is aware that there is a mr wonderful waiting to soak up those tears of sadness. nicely written |
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Manda_1982 Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 24Washington State,USA |
I'm not sure what else to say other than I loved this. It was so close to heart, Thank you for a wonderful piece  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice expression of your feelings...James |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
A very touching piece. Many images and deep thoughts. i enjoyed this, though it was quite sad. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sad write filled with an ache that emits from within. Well done. All writing comes |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SueTang~ I just loved the haunting longing that stood out in this. 'As she glances longingly out the window Just hoping he will come into view' He does show up - doesn't he ? Sure he does ... she believes he will - so he will ! (I like happy endings - so in case he doesn't, don't tell me.)  Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Thanks one and all for all your lovely comments. I guess a lot of my writing is affected by my mood at a particular moment and this one said it all..........Sue Suetang |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very touching and haunting words Sue. This was very well written poetess. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sue, This is good writing and a lovely, yet sad story, my friend. Michael Proust- |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very well expressed. But I hope she doesn't take him back to easily. Joyce |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Gentle Spirit Thank you for your kind words......Sue Michael This was a reflection on my mood the day this was written........Sue Joyce All I can say is that she lives in hope...Sue Suetang |
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