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0 posted 2001-04-21 11:57 PM





Sunset
Colors blend to one
Rolling clouds serenity
Softly fading sun.


Flying Bird
Soft feathered wings
Beats in rhythm of the heart
Such complete freedom


Roses
Petals outstretched
Delicate beauty outlines
Each fragrant fold.


TaraB

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Tara~
These are just BEAUTIFUL !
My goodness ... so very, very pleasant to greet this day !
Thank you oodles for sharing.
~*Marge*~

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RP~ SO softly you did these..... I love the first one......   SEA
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Perfect!!! Each is an haiku, not a senyru here, for all is concrete, no analogies nor personification that I often see in an attempted haiku.  I wish I could do these...I always thought I could until I learned I was really writing senyrus.  Didn't even know there was such a thing as a senyru until the last 6 months.  This comment may seem more about me, but I'm really trying to show you how much I truly appreciate your ability to do these so very well!
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