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tradewind
Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 101

0 posted 2001-03-26 01:29 PM

when the ulcers came...
thoughts of you chewing
the limited parts of me
unaffected by pain
i gobbled the pills
ate the chalk of experience
gagged on the truth
forced myself to swallow

when the ulcers came...
your depravities exposed
while the acid of them
claimed my intestines
i separated myself
from the one doubled over
and everyone praised
my perfect posture
but alone, late at night
i regurgitate reasons
for deceptive spine
and perfect weight

your perversive hands
on our only child...
the memory that dug
these holes
in my stomach

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

1 posted 2001-03-26 01:40 PM

Damn. I'm sorry for pain. I think this horrendous act should not go unpunished. Please, take this child away, NOW.
Melton

tradewind
Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 101

2 posted 2001-03-26 02:21 PM

although i appreciate the concern...i must remind you to keep in mind, that this is not an autobiograpical poem. i wrote it in the first person because i feel it has more impact that way.(seems it does) it was drawn on the experience of an old friend years ago. poets write about many things, using first person or third for various reasons. my poems are sometimes fact, fiction, fantasy...hey, we are writers, using imagination as well as reality then spilling them on a page in the hopes they will touch the reader. i appreciate the fact that this drew such a compassionate response from you but would ask that you not take EVERY poem i write
to be autobiographical...well, do ya think i've proven myself true to my name, ramblings??? hehe thank you for reading and commenting...appreciate it

duke
Junior Member

since 2001-03-26

Posts 12

3 posted 2001-03-26 03:37 PM

I liked this poem it sound it melachonlic
but has an inner life of its own.

Good Read

Panne415
Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 104
San Antonio