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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 2001-04-20 06:06 PM


Would that I could but touch that which burns so
Thou art resplendent in all thy glory
As to cause harm dealt by the cruelest blow
Yet I cannot resist to write thy story
I would but for just a touch crawl on glass
A prayer I would pray nothing shall impede
As determined to seek thee to the last
For any cost would I pay to fill this need
Just one touch, one caress to make things whole
Even if just for a moment in time
Would be enough to save a damaged soul
Enough to quench the fire in this mind

Nothing will end the pain of you and me
Not until night falls as I lay with thee



© Copyright 2001 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
Tiersdin
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1 posted 2001-04-20 06:22 PM


Now this is what romance is all about!

Wonderful!!

-Tier

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2 posted 2001-04-20 07:07 PM


your words..........so romantic.........move me........and cloud my eyes.....this is a definate keeper......in my heart.....as well as my library  
SEA
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3 posted 2001-04-20 07:08 PM


I got so teary eyed, I didn't hit the library button.....damn this is beautiful.....   SEA
walker
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4 posted 2001-04-20 07:50 PM


Beautiful Anguish, just beautiful!
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5 posted 2001-04-20 10:43 PM


couldn't help myself....just wanted to read this again.... *sigh* so beautiful.    SEA
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6 posted 2001-04-20 10:57 PM


PoeticKnight,

      My lord.. this is THE most romantic thing I have read in a looong time... you have succeeded in making me completely swooooon...lol.   This one is definately going in my library! Wonderful.. just wonderful.

TaraB

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7 posted 2001-04-21 01:11 AM


thou hast indeed done well with this one Knight of the Heart. . . I salute thee. . .



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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Joyce Johnson
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8 posted 2001-04-21 02:09 AM


This is indeed, quite beautiful.  Joyce
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2001-04-21 02:41 AM


This is incredible, PK. This is totally transcendant verse---very spiritual--and much of our greatest love poetry is actually the expression of the search for God. This falls in that category. I love this one.  (and I do have a fondness for sonnet.   )

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 04-21-2001).]

Sunshine
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10 posted 2001-04-21 08:26 AM


Thou indeed has served Him well
who first serves mankind all
so take thy spirit, nay, not dwell
as thou hast heard thy poet's call.

A Whisper's Caress
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11 posted 2001-04-21 10:10 AM


sigh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2001-04-21 11:48 AM


PK, I love this style.......sigh....and you do it all so well......:}

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2001-04-21 11:49 AM


and just because I forgot to hit the library button.....again.....beautiful.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

EagleScorpion
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14 posted 2001-04-21 01:45 PM


hehehe... I know what that last couple of lines leads to!! (giggle giggle)

Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for.

nakdthoughts
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15 posted 2001-04-21 02:22 PM


once again, your poetic prowess comes through, *s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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16 posted 2001-04-21 02:42 PM


*sigh* *melts*
Geesh..
Very nice conclusions and resolve here. I love it.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

JLR
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17 posted 2001-04-21 02:49 PM


So this is how you spell romance.  Wonderful!
Janet Marie
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18 posted 2001-04-23 05:52 PM


Would that I could but touch that which burns so
=======================
I would but for just a touch crawl on glass
======================
For any cost would I pay to fill this need
Just one touch, one caress to make things whole
Even if just for a moment in time
Would be enough to save a damaged soul
Enough to quench the fire in this mind

Nothing will end the pain of you and me
Not until night falls as I lay with thee
========================

This is a classic example of your poetry at its best...
and the exact reason that we keep coming back to read you time and time again...
this style is what drew me to your poetry from the first read, its your pen at its best.
this is outstanding...
the vocabulary and phrasing is poetic perfection as is the rhyme and cadence
but all those technical things pale in the light of the depth of the poetic expression of the emotions.
Romantic poetry at its best.
This is one of your best J...and you know thats list grows longer everyday..
but when I see a gifted poet....
I gotta worship, its my duty.  *L*
very cool write.

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.


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