Open Poetry #13 |
Everything I Never Could Become |
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Everything I Never Could Become (with thanks to Michael Auguste for the inspiration of his poem, "Let Me Be") Let me be the finger of a child on fogged up window or the sky as it turns from blue to indigo. Let me be the scent of rain on freshly planted soil, the smile of pride that emerges on a face after all that toil. I’d like to be vibration from thunder in the clouds, or the sound of violins falling on a listening crowd. I could be giggles of children in pool’s hot summer stay, the cry of seagulls from the pier on a fisherman’s lucky day. If I was the boat’s anchor pushed by oceans sway, I could see the splash that glistens in the water as dolphin’s play. I think I’ll be the bursting bubbles from the Champaign tray shared by newlyweds and friends on a wedding day. I love the fragrant perfume that lingers on you hair, so during a shampoo let me be the fingers there. Let me be whispered words of love on a park bench, the pride of a farmer viewing his harvest from the fence. Let me be the constant snap in the bubble gum of a boy who just made his very first home run. Let me be the skin under fingertips caress, the crinkling sound of taffeta on a daughter’s dress. Let me be the fluttering heart beat after a first kiss, the liquid in the straw that everyone calls chocolate bliss. Let me be the pause between will you marry me and yes, the glowing love in eyes behind the veil in wedding dress. Let me be a message in a bottle for awhile, or the first word of a baby that makes a daddy smile. Let me be words, "Love me tender" from an Elvis Presley song or lead me in a dance around the room, I’ll be the gown. Let me stop this, let me now before I do succumb to becoming almost everything I never could become. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sometimes to simply be isn't enough, and your writing makes the things you wish to be tantalizing. I loved this. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Like you need more 'inspiration' to write so beautifully ! ! But ... thank you Michael Auguste! ! Slightly GORGEOUS, my poet friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, you can be...and are..everything you want to be.... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Let me be a message in a bottle for awhile, or the first word of a baby that makes a daddy smile. I kept trying to pick one I liked best - took me 10 minutes but there is my choice! Lady, you are all of those things and more! We are truly blessed by your gift. Thank you. ~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, You are most welcome. Let me say that I truly love this wonderful poem. So many lovely thoughts in such a dear sweet friend. (((hugs))) Michael Proust- |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Martie, you simply amaze me ... your incredibly wonderful imagery cascaded throughout this wonderful poem, over and over. Like Mysteria, I too tried to choose my favorite lines, but they were all delightful and so very vivid. I think the little baseball player snapping gum brought me the biggest grin, but they ALL made me smile. A thank you to Michael for his inspiration to you ... I adored this piece! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, you are all this....and you be a little more, as well! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I think I’ll be the bursting bubbles from the Champaign tray shared by newlyweds and friends on a wedding day. I love the fragrant perfume that lingers on you hair, so during a shampoo let me be the fingers there. ============================= Let me be the skin under fingertips caress, the crinkling sound of taffeta on a daughter’s dress. ========================== Let me be the pause between will you marry me and yes, the glowing love in eyes behind the veil in wedding dress. ======================= yer so cool....these are so unique and clever as is the poet who wrote it... loved these images and the anticpation in them. way cool!! I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, Michael, for inspiring these words. *S* And Martie... what a treasure this is... delightful images dance from verse to verse and every line is so good I didn't want it to end. *S* |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
succomb to becoming ... what a weave. Well done! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Delightful - Thisa line of thinking - could lead to a "round" - wherein - poets add their own verses - making a piece that just goes 'on' - Perhaps I presume too much - but I believe you innspire us all = this is a treasure for me regardless |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
We are the stories we tell so very well, all this and so much more. What an innovative take on existance passing as life. Superb! "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I love this. Finding the wonders all around us and lingering there awhile. Wonderful. Joyce |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh I don't think so sweetheart.....those are not things you never could become because you're already a part of all of them as you have just proved by writing this wonderful poetic work. Another fine work done in the open hearted Martie style! Believe me you are a part of all those things in your own special way! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic writing, Martie! I am so in awe at the way your mind works. This is simply fabulous! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed - to be able to spend a moment or two within your mind would be a treat... This is truly wonderful, Martie... |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Letting yourself be you has created this lovely verse. |
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