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When Stars Fall
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When Stars Fall |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Lazy Sundays spent Taking time thinking Of old memories or making New ones, it is then when I Look around to see what Might be left of you and me A silent laugh, maybe a Quick smile, interlaced With the soft touch of our Last good-bye, I find it Still flows through the air when thinking of you In dreams at night I see the glow of the moon, As it plays softly on your skin You still take my breath away, As you weave to my heart, your love A safe haven from this tower Of walls that were once strong Within you To be weekend lovers, again As we watch the sky Together at night, leaving Footprints across every star We wished upon Your map of love still trails My body to every place you have touched, Every place you have been inside, Every place I still feel This moment is all I have to hold You in, somewhere when all your doors Of love close, and a new opens, Far beyond the moonlight and The footprints left, these two Hearts will fall silently once again I know you will touch my distant Dreams as I reach for you When the sun fades, and The moon is high, As the breeze of summer Blows over you and I As we smile against the sky Two stars will fall *** "Within you I lose myself |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What can I say. This is a splendid write! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
It isn't often that I run across a piece of writing that is written so very well. This is simply a masterpiece. Thanks for sharing it. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The imagery in this piece is beautiful.. very well done! subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Last good-bye, I find it Still flows through the air when thinking of you In dreams at night I see the glow of the moon, As it plays softly on your skin You still take my breath away, As you weave to my heart, your love A safe haven from this tower Of walls that were once strong Within you ========================= leaving Footprints across every star We wished upon Your map of love still trails My body to every place you have touched, Every place you have been inside, Every place I still feel ======================= Far beyond the moonlight and The footprints left, these two Hearts will fall silently once again I know you will touch my distant Dreams as I reach for you When the sun fades, and The moon is high, As the breeze of summer Blows over you and I As we smile against the sky Two stars will fall ======================== nothing I could say will do this ones beauty and intent of inspire justice ... or truely convey the way it effected me ... so I will simply thank you for it and place it with my other treasures. I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Excellent...no command to say any more..~Wasi~ I love to nice poetry. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and you wonder why I love your writing Greeneyes. . .  wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Dreamy Lauren, so beautiful.....*s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ 'This moment is all I have to hold You in, somewhere when all your doors Of love close, and a new opens, Far beyond the moonlight and The footprints left, these two Hearts will fall silently once again' 'As we smile against the sky Two stars will fall *** And you lit up the night sky with the beauty of this piece. Exquisite ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lauren, Absolutely lovely, my friend. Your imagery is always so wonderfully used. This is a keeper. Michael Proust- |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my! If this was not as pretty as you are! Beauty and brains can be a wonderful thing, and you just proved it! This was one fantastic piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing it. ~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading your poem....James |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
For all that responded I am humbled....it has been a great pleasure writing and replying here at passions....thanks to you all for being who you are and for allowing my words to enter your eyes....be well and hugs to all.... Sincerely Lauren~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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